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Some people believe that people who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.4

Some people believe that people who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV. v. 4
It is widely believed that reading books is a better way for people to develop their imagination and language skills, in comparison with watching TV. From my perspective, although I partly agree with this opinion, I would argue that language skills can be acquired more effectively by watching TV, and will give my reasons below. On the one hand, books apparently are better tools than TV to enhance a person’s creativity. It is undeniable that words enable readers to visualize what they read, and there is no restriction to such imaginative thinking. For instance, if two different individuals read the book “One thousand and one nights” simultaneously, it is possible for them to visualize two different images of Aladdin, who is the main character in this story. In contrast, whether a million of people watch the movie “Aladdin” on TV together, the only Aladdin that they can think of afterwards will be the one played by Mena Massoud. This demonstrates that watching TV is overcome by reading books in term of the ability to stimulate one’s imagination. On the other hand, watching TV performs a more important role in learning language skills, compared to reading books. This can be further seen in the fact that TV with sound effects has the capacity to help watchers sharpen their listening and speaking skills efficiently, thereby improving their language comprehension. Perhaps the best example of this is Khanh Vy, who is one of the most well-known teenagers in Viet Nam at the moment thanks to her linguistic ability. She is a dazzling polyglot and fluent in four languages, including English, Chinese, Japanese and Korean. In the TV show “The IELTS workshop” last year, she confessed that she spend about 5 hours on watching movies in foreign languages without subtitles daily, and she believed that it is the best approach for people, especially the young ones, to learn new languages. In conclusion, it seems to me that people should read books in order to develop imagination, while it is better for them to watch TV with the purpose of improving their language skills due to the above-mentioned reasons.
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widely
believed that reading
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books
is a better way for
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people
to develop their imagination and
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language
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skills
,
in comparison
with watching TV. From my perspective, although I partly
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agree
with this opinion, I would argue that
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language
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skills
can
be acquired
more
effectively
by watching TV, and will give my reasons below.

On the one hand,
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books
apparently
are better tools than TV to enhance a person’s creativity. It is undeniable that words enable readers to visualize what they read, and there is no restriction to such imaginative thinking.
For instance
, if two
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different
individuals read the
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book
“
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One thousand and one nights
”
simultaneously
, it is possible for them to visualize two
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different
images of Aladdin, who is the main character in this story.
In contrast
, whether a million of
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people
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watch
the movie “Aladdin” on TV together, the
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only
Aladdin that they can
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think
of afterwards will be the one played by
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Mena
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Massoud
. This demonstrates that watching TV
is overcome
by reading
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books
in term of the ability to stimulate one’s imagination.

On the other hand
, watching TV performs a more
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important
role in learning
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language
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skills
, compared to reading
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books
. This can be
further
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seen
in the fact that TV with sound effects has the capacity to
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help
watchers sharpen their listening and speaking
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skills
efficiently
, thereby improving their
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language
comprehension. Perhaps the best example of this is
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Khanh
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Vy
, who is one of the most well-known
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teenagers
in
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Viet
Nam at the moment thanks to her linguistic ability. She is a dazzling polyglot and fluent in four
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languages
, including English, Chinese, Japanese and Korean. In the TV
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show
“The IELTS workshop” last year, she confessed that she spend about 5 hours on watching movies in foreign
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languages
without subtitles daily, and she believed that it is the best approach for
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people
,
especially
the young
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ones
, to learn new languages.

In conclusion
, it seems to me that
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people
should read
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books
in order to develop imagination, while it is better for them to
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watch
TV with the purpose of improving their
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language
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skills
due to the above-mentioned reasons.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that people who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
354 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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Grammatical Range: 8.0
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Task Achievement: 8.0
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