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Some people believe that people who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV. Discuss both views and give your own opinions. v.2

Some people believe that people who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV. v. 2
It is true that the question of whether people who read books or those watching TV can develop more imagination and language skills remains a resource of controversy in these days. While a number of people believe that reading books is the most effective way to enhance their imagination and language capabilities, I would argue that increasing those skills by watching TV is much more reasonable. On the one hand, there are a variety of reasons why people consider reading books as a method to raise their frame of mind and expression skills. Firstly, every book has its own phraseology style with diversified words which helps readers to expand their vocabulary and grammars. As a consequence, language learners can improve their reading and writing skills effectively. Secondly, as books, mainly include the description of authors going along without images or photos, readers aspires to imagine about the book's content and at the same time, build up their own imaginary world of reading. My grandfather also learned Chinese by reading books as his main method to study a new language and due to hard learning, he did it well. On the other hand, I believe that reading limits some skills such as speaking and listening which watching TV can easily help us. For instance, people often just keep their eyes on pages, but not speak out loud while reading books. By contrary, watching TV requires viewers to concentrate on listening and seeing what are going on, that definitely improves their listening skill. Besides, through a Television screen, people can observe speakers’ movement of mouth and emotion, lively scenes and interesting programs which could create an interactive environment for both studying and entertaining regarding to viewer’s purposes. In conclusion, although reading books are advantageous for some people to expand their imagination and language skills, it seems to me that it is better and more interesting way to watch TV to adopt those capabilities.
It is true that
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the question of whether
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people
who read
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books
or those watching TV can develop more imagination and
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language
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skills
remains a resource of controversy in these days. While a number of
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people
believe that
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reading
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books
is the most effective way to enhance their imagination and
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language
capabilities, I would argue that increasing those
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skills
by watching TV is much more reasonable.

On the one hand, there are a variety of reasons why
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people
consider
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reading
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books
as a method to raise their frame of mind and expression
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skills
.
Firstly
, every
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book
has its
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own
phraseology style with diversified words which
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helps
readers to expand their vocabulary and grammars. As a consequence,
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language
learners can
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improve
their
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reading
and writing
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skills
effectively
.
Secondly
, as
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books
,
mainly
include the description of authors going along without images or photos, readers aspires to imagine about the book's content and at the same time, build up their
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own
imaginary world of
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reading
. My grandfather
also
learned Chinese by
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reading
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books
as his main method to study a new
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language
and due to
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hard
learning, he did it well.

On the other hand
, I believe that
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reading
limits
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some
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skills
such as speaking and listening which watching TV can
easily
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help
us.
For instance
,
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people
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their eyes on pages,
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not speak out loud while
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reading
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books
. By contrary, watching TV requires viewers to concentrate on listening and seeing what are going on, that definitely
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improves
their listening
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skill
.
Besides
, through a Television screen,
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people
can observe speakers’ movement of mouth and emotion, lively scenes and interesting programs which could create an interactive environment for both studying and entertaining
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regarding to
viewer’s purposes.

In conclusion
, although
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reading
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books
are advantageous for
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some
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people
to expand their imagination and
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language
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skills
, it seems to me that it is better and more interesting way to
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watch
TV to adopt those capabilities.
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Learn everything you can, anytime you can, from anyone you can; there will always come a time when you will be grateful you did.
Sarah Caldwell

IELTS essay Some people believe that people who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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