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Some people believe that online reading material should only be used for a child to learn to read, whereas others believe only printed materials should be used. Discuss both views, and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people believe that online reading material should only be used for a child to learn to read, whereas others believe only printed materials should be used. v. 1
According to some, children learn to read from online content because of its convenience, while others argued that, for reading purposes, the printed material should be consumed. In my opinion, printed material is a more reliable option because it makes children more focussed and provide better understanding. On the one hand, many people think that online reading is easily accessible, convenient, and usually free. Children can read their favourite books from anywhere, like from home, during travelling, or at work by using their mobile device. Moreover, many reading materials available at either no or minimal cost. For example, according to a survey conducted in one of the London university reveals that over 60%of students prefer to read their textbook online and don't like to buy or burrow the printed version. However, I believe that it's hard to stay focused while reading on any digital nomad. On the other hand, the student becomes more focussed while reading a book, article, or magazine. Additionally, written materials are more authentic and reliable and provide an in-depth understanding of the subject comparatively. According to many researchers, while reading online, it's effortless to distract and left the reading in the middle and navigate away, which wastes one's valuable time. Current research suggests that reading online results in lower understanding and less critical reflection. In conclusion, although, on-screen reading materials are a more feasible approach, I firmly believe reading a book provides an in-depth understanding and less distraction.
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, children learn to read from
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online
content
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of its convenience, while others argued that, for
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reading
purposes, the printed
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material
should
be consumed
. In my opinion, printed
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material
is a more reliable option
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children more focussed and provide better understanding.

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many
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people
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online
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reading
is
easily
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usually
free. Children can read their
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favourite
books from anywhere, like from home, during travelling, or at work by using their mobile device.
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,
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reading
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materials
available at either
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no
or minimal cost.
For example
, according to a survey conducted in one of the London university reveals that over 60%of students prefer to read their textbook
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online
and don't like to
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buy
or burrow the printed version.
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, I believe that it's
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hard
to stay focused while
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reading
on any digital nomad.

On the other hand
, the student becomes more focussed while
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reading
a book, article, or magazine.
Additionally
, written
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materials
are more authentic and reliable and provide an in-depth understanding of the subject
comparatively
. According to
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many
researchers, while
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reading
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online
, it's effortless to distract and
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left
the
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reading
in the middle and navigate away, which wastes one's valuable time.
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Current
research suggests that
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reading
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online
results in lower understanding and less critical reflection.

In conclusion
, although, on-screen
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reading
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materials
are a more feasible approach, I
firmly
believe
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reading
a book provides an in-depth understanding and less distraction.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that online reading material should only be used for a child to learn to read, whereas others believe only printed materials should be used. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
242 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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