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Some people believe that online reading material should only be used for a child to learn to read, whereas, other believe only printed material should be used. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Some people believe that online reading material should only be used for a child to learn to read, whereas, other believe only printed material should be used. v. 2
Online learning and reading have indeed become increasingly popular activity nowadays due to the advent of technology. While some argue that traditional printed books are more beneficial for the children, I, however, agree with those who hold the opinion that online learning is more advantageous for the child to learn to read. On the one hand, it could be thought that children can learn very well through printed material. As in the pre-technological era, the traditional method was followed by all schools and universities around the world to teach students reading. For example, this is the reason even today in India most of the schools in rural areas, implement this approach, where technology still has not introduced yet. Moreover, it could be said that books generally the child a sense of touching which often encourages them to complete book by keeping targets how many pages have to finish. Consequently, not only does the child motivate to achieve learning targets, but also it prevents them from distracting mind in other activities. On the other hand, I would argue that reading and learning is more accessible for youngsters if it is taught through online sources. Since online learning and reading allow them to access easily regardless of the time and place respectively, which means that offspring are free to use it anytime according to their convenience. Furthermore, online material is always up to date, whereas, this content is missing in printed books because children tend to learn and read in a fun way by watching videos and listening to songs. As a result, they can learn more easily and quickly. For instance, a survey conducted by the New York Times found that 60% of offspring who learn online reading are more active to catch anything through videos rather than children who follow printed books. In conclusion, although children sometimes motivated by accepting challenges to complete reading targets, online line learning usually allows children to learn reading more quickly and that would be at one’s convenience. Therefore, on balance, I strongly believe that online material should be used not only for reading but also for learning.
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argue that traditional
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are more beneficial for the
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, I,
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is more advantageous for the child to
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to read.

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that
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can
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printed
material. As in the
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pre-technological
era, the traditional method
was followed
by all schools and universities around the world to teach students
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.
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today
in India most of the schools in rural areas, implement this approach, where technology
still
has not introduced
yet
.
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, it could
be said
that
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books
generally
the child a sense of touching which
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encourages them to complete
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book
by keeping targets how
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many
pages
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have to
finish.
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, not
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does the child motivate to achieve
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learning
targets,
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also
it
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prevents
them from distracting mind in other activities.

On the other hand
, I would argue that
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reading
and
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learning
is more accessible for youngsters if it
is taught
through
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online
sources. Since
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and
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allow
them to access
easily
regardless of the time and place
respectively
, which means that offspring are free to
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use
it anytime according to their convenience.
Furthermore
,
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online
material is always up to date, whereas, this content is missing in
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printed
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books
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because
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children
tend to
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learn
and read
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in a fun way
by watching videos and listening to songs.
As a result
, they can
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learn
more
easily
and
quickly
.
For instance
, a survey conducted by the New York Times found that 60% of offspring who
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learn
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online
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reading
are more active to catch anything through videos
rather
than
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children
who follow
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printed
books.

In conclusion
, although
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motivated by accepting challenges
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to complete
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targets,
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online
line
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usually
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allows
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children
to
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learn
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reading
more
quickly
and that would be at one’s convenience.
Therefore
, on balance, I
strongly
believe that
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online
material should be
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used
not
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only
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.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that online reading material should only be used for a child to learn to read, whereas, other believe only printed material should be used. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
353 words
8.5
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