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Some people believe that not all criminals should be kept in prison but that some of them should be allowed to do unpaid work to help the community do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people believe that not all criminals should be kept in prison but that some of them should be allowed to do unpaid work to help the community v. 1
Not every criminal is the same. Every criminal is not a professional criminal or has the intention to do the wrong. At times, it is because of the situation that they have to commit a felony. As we all know that beating anybody is a misdemeanour and beating a woman is a super offence, a person was seen slapping a girl in the video. But the footage was quite long about a minute or two where the woman was seen harassing the guy, slapping him before his actions. She was drunk. So aforementioned was not his fault or intentions to slap her, but it was the situation where he was left with no option Now if that would not have been recorded and the women would have filed a case, the guy has the chances of being declared as the criminal. Not every criminal is a criminal. I mean that the person has not even committed the crime, but because of some false pieces of evidence. Since he is not at fault, so keeping him in prison will pollute his mind as he is surrounded by some actual criminals who are always up intending to commit the violation. He may become a criminal because of the wrong decision taken for him to keep him in prison. Keeping them in prisons makes them socially unfit and they find hard to fit into society. Their personal development is hindered. They are not aware of the current affairs. In other word, keeping them in prison increases their chance of becoming real criminals.
Not every
criminal
is the same. Every
criminal
is not a professional
criminal
or has the intention to do the
wrong
. At times, it is
because
of the situation that they
have to
commit a felony. As we all know that beating anybody is a
misdemeanour
and beating a woman is a super
offence
, a person was
seen
slapping a girl in the video.
But
the footage was quite long about a minute or two where the woman was
seen
harassing the guy, slapping him
before
his actions. She
was drunk
.
So
aforementioned was not his fault or intentions to slap her,
but
it was the situation where he was
left
with no option
Now
if that would not have
been recorded
and the women would have filed a case, the guy has the chances of
being declared
as the criminal.

Not every
criminal
is a
criminal
. I mean that the person has not even committed the crime,
but
because
of
some
false pieces of evidence. Since he is not at fault,
so
keeping him in prison will pollute his mind as he
is surrounded
by
some
actual
criminals
who are always up intending to commit the violation. He may become a
criminal
because
of the
wrong
decision taken for him to
keep
him in prison.

Keeping them in prisons
makes
them
socially
unfit and
they find
hard
to fit into society. Their personal development
is hindered
. They are not aware of the
current
affairs. In other word, keeping them in prison increases their chance of becoming real
criminals
.
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that not all criminals should be kept in prison but that some of them should be allowed to do unpaid work to help the community v. 1

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
259 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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