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Some people believe that life in a large city is becoming more and more arduous, while the life in villages is much more beneficial. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.2

Some people believe that life in a large city is becoming more and more arduous, while the life in villages is much more beneficial. v. 2
Many arguers are of the view that living in rural areas is advantageous for civilians, as compared to metropolitans where it is exhausting. I agree with the former statement, whereas i also believe that urban life provide significant benefits compared to stress it brings. Firstly, the essay will justify the convenience achieved as a result of spending life in the countrysides and villages. However, it will also explain the significant benefits to live in urban parts. Generally, people find life in remote areas to be less stressful as compared to cities. This is due to to the peace achieved in life as a result of being away from common daily problems of cities such as heavy traffic jams, noise and pollution. Furthermore, these areas are a self remedy for stress and anxiety because of the mesmerizing sceneries such as greeneries, water bodies, mountains and so on. Consequently, these features contribute to an overall relaxed lifestyle. For instance, many tourists across the world prefer travelling to remote areas during holidays and vacations. On the other hand, life in giant cities is although stressful, but it also significantly contributes to attaining benefits such as a high standard of living. This is due to the fact that urban areas have a well developed system as compared to villages, where people have limited access to basic facilities of life such as schools, hospitals, better civil infrastructure and so on. As a result, life in metropolitan cities is although busy, exhausting and stressful; however, people still have simple access to common facilities as compared to undeveloped rural areas. To finalize, countrysides are favourable for many to stay due to the relief it brings. However, living in urban areas accounts for vital convenience.
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arguers are of the view that living in rural
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areas
is advantageous for civilians, as compared to metropolitans where it is exhausting. I
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agree
with the former statement, whereas
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i
also
believe that
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urban
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life
provide significant benefits compared to
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stress
it brings.
Firstly
, the essay will justify the convenience achieved
as a result
of spending
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life
in the countrysides and villages.
However
, it will
also
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explain
the significant benefits to
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live
in
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urban
parts.

Generally
,
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people
find
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life
in remote
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areas
to be less stressful as compared to
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cities
. This is due
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to to
the peace achieved in
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life
as a result
of being away from common daily problems of
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cities
such as heavy traffic jams, noise and pollution.
Furthermore
, these
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areas
are a self remedy for
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stress
and anxiety
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because
of the mesmerizing sceneries such as
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greeneries
, water bodies, mountains and
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so
on.
Consequently
, these features contribute to an
overall
relaxed lifestyle.
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,
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many
tourists across the world prefer travelling to remote
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areas
during holidays and vacations.

On the other hand
,
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life
in giant
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cities
is although stressful,
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but
it
also
significantly
contributes to attaining benefits such as a high standard of living.
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urban
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areas
have a
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well developed
system as compared to villages, where
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people
have limited access to basic facilities of
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life
such as schools, hospitals, better civil infrastructure and
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so
on.
As a result
,
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life
in metropolitan
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cities
is although busy, exhausting and stressful;
however
,
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people
still
have simple access to common facilities as compared to undeveloped rural areas.

To finalize, countrysides are
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favourable
for
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many
to stay due to the relief it brings.
However
, living in
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urban
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areas
accounts for vital convenience.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that life in a large city is becoming more and more arduous, while the life in villages is much more beneficial. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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