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In some large cities, people have to pay a fee when they drive their cars into the city centre, in a policy to reduce the number of cars in the city. Give reasons in support of and opposing this policy, and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.1

In some large cities, people have to pay a fee when they drive their cars into the city centre, in a policy to reduce the number of cars in the city. Give reasons in support of and opposing this policy, and give your own opinion. v. 1
As many large cities Around The World become increasingly crowded and polluted, imposing a charge for cars that enter city centres is an attractive Idea. Although it does have some drawbacks, I support this proposal, though with some reservations. Making drivers pay a fee to drive into the centre of the city would discourage some drivers, which would reduce the amount of traffic congestion as well as air pollution. Public buses and trams would then be able to get to their destinations faster, so commuters would not spend so much time travelling to and from work. City Centres would be more pleasant places for workers, shoppers, cyclists and pedestrians in general. It can be a argued that this policy would discriminate against those who are less well off, because wealthy drivers would not be deterred by such a fee. Also, if the government failed to invest more money in public transport, travel by bus or tram could become more uncomfortable for the greater number of passengers. On top of that, it could be logistically and technically very difficult to install the equipment needed at the main points at which cars could enter the city centre. I think that this policy is a good idea, through the fee on cars would not necessarily have to be enforced on weekends or late at night. This policy has the potential to make City centres more accessible for the general public provided that there was an efficient public transport system that was a viable alternative to the private car. Overall, these policy worth trying in order to reduce the domination of city centres by motor vehicles and to create a cleaner and more attractive urban environment.
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increasingly
crowded and polluted, imposing a charge for cars that enter city
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is an attractive
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. Although it does have
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some
drawbacks, I support this proposal, though with
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reservations.

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centre
of the city would discourage
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some
drivers, which would
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reduce
the amount of traffic congestion
as well
as air pollution.
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Public
buses and trams would then be able to
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get
to their destinations faster,
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so
commuters would not spend
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so
much time travelling to and from work. City
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Centres
would be more pleasant places for workers, shoppers, cyclists and pedestrians
in general
.

It can be
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argued that this
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policy
would discriminate against those who are less well off,
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because
wealthy drivers would not
be deterred
by such a fee.
Also
, if the
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government
failed to invest more money in
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public
transport, travel by bus or tram could become more uncomfortable for the greater number of passengers.
On top of that
, it could be
logistically
and
technically
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very
difficult to install the equipment needed at the main points at which cars could enter the city
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centre
.

I
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think
that this
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policy
is a
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good
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idea
, through the fee on cars would not
necessarily
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have to
be enforced
on weekends or late at night. This
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policy
has the potential to
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make
City
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centres
more accessible for the general
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public
provided that there was an efficient
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public
transport system that was a viable alternative to the private car.

Overall
, these
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policy
worth trying in order to
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reduce
the domination of city
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centres
by motor vehicles and to create a cleaner and more attractive urban environment.
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IELTS essay In some large cities, people have to pay a fee when they drive their cars into the city centre, in a policy to reduce the number of cars in the city. Give reasons in support of and opposing this policy, and give your own opinion. v. 1

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6.5
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