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Some people believe that it is good idea to express their point of view and ideas through social media however others believe opposite do you agree or disagree v.1

Some people believe that it is good idea to express their point of view and ideas through social media however others believe opposite v. 1
Expressing perspectives and notions by making use of social media is becoming increasingly common nowadays. However, some people are not in favour of expressing views and ideas using social networks. I strongly agree with the concept of sharing opinion worldwide through the use of social communication channel. To begin with, the internet is currently the backbone of many nations around the world. As more and more people educating themselves on the use of computers or mobiles. It is the need of the hour that the opinions and ideas on any topic can be shared with mass audiences, as it had a plethora of benefits associated with it. Firstly, the idea will reach to the majority of people connected with social media. Secondly, you may get a lot of feedback about your idea which would help you to make some improvements in your idea. Furthermore, in some cases it has been observed that a unique idea that could make an impact on the society received funding from top notch countries around the world to convert that notion into reality. Nowadays every company in the world tries to gather customer viewpoints on a particular product they will be launching in the market in the near future to get a sense of whether a product appeal to the masses or not. However, it has been noticed that in some cases, someone else is claiming the ownership of an idea rather than the original owner but these can be avoided with stringent copyright laws. To conclude, perspectives and opinions should be shared on social idea so that more and more people get benefits out of it.
Expressing perspectives and notions by making
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media is becoming
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,
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people
are not in
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favour
of expressing views and
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ideas
using
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social
networks. I
strongly
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agree
with the concept of sharing opinion worldwide through the
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use
of
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social
communication channel.

To
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begin
with, the internet is
currently
the backbone of
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many
nations around the world. As more and more
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people
educating themselves on the
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use
of computers or mobiles. It is the need of the hour that the opinions and
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ideas
on any topic can
be shared
with mass audiences, as it had a plethora of benefits associated with it.
Firstly
, the
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idea
will reach to the majority of
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people
connected with
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social
media.
Secondly
, you may
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get
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a lot of
feedback about your
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idea
which would
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help
you to
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make
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some
improvements in your
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idea
.
Furthermore
, in
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some
cases it has
been observed
that a unique
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idea
that could
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make
an impact on the society received funding from
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top notch
countries around the world to convert that notion into reality.

Nowadays every
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company
in the world tries to gather customer viewpoints on a particular product they will be launching in the market in the near future to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a sense of whether a product appeal to the masses or not.
However
, it has
been noticed
that in
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some
cases, someone else is claiming the ownership of an
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idea
rather
than the original owner
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but
these can
be avoided
with stringent copyright laws.

To conclude
, perspectives and opinions should
be shared
on
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social
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idea
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so
that more and more
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people
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get
benefits out of it.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
As a hawk flieth not high with one wing, even so a man reacheth not to excellence with one tongue.
Roger Ascham

IELTS essay Some people believe that it is good idea to express their point of view and ideas through social media however others believe opposite v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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