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Some people believe that it is a good idea to express that point of view and ideas through social media. however, others believe the opposite. do you agree or disagree. v.1

Some people believe that it is a good idea to express that point of view and ideas through social media. however, others believe the opposite. v. 1
Nowadays, people are living in a full of the advancement of the technological era. Hence, people squander such technologies up to the fullest. Social media are considered as the biggest assets for every age of people. Nowadays, humans are posting their work things on social media. Moreover, express their point of view on such communication sites. So, a few people believe that it is good to express their thoughts on social sites. Nevertheless, some people do not favor such facts. In my perception, I disagree with the latter point. Though, the essay will focus on both sides and will reflect my opinion before coming to the conclusion. This paragraph will throw some light on why it is beneficial to express our views on public sites. To commence with, such applications are considered to be an amazing innovation of mankind. Due to post things by others can keep everyone updated about what is happening across the globe. For instance, recent news about a lethal virus named coronavirus which has created a threat among humanity across the earth. Hence, to bring awareness among humankind social networking applications such as Twitter, Snapchat, Facebook and many more are offering a helping hand to the government. Moreover, videos and safety messages are shared on such sites to bring insight as soon as possible. On the contrary, a few argue that to reflect the ideas and point of view regarding anything may become controversial. For example, a few years ago a renowned former Indian cricket team captain Mahendra sing Dhoni was criticized by Sanjay Manjrekar on the social platform, twitter. As a result, some devotees of Mahendra Singh Dhoni got furious at him. Those words of Sanjay Manjrekar had hurt the emotion of the fans. So, some people oppose utilizing such applications. However, in my perception, positive points are more as compared to negative points. So, it is good to share ideas and thoughts on public sites. To put in a nutshell, I would like to say that, social media can be used more looking forward to the safety of humankind rather than opposing it.
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squander such technologies up to the fullest.
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media
are considered
as the biggest assets for every age of
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people
. Nowadays, humans are posting their work things on
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social
media.
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, express their
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point
of view on such communication
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sites
.
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, a few
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people
believe that it is
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good
to express their thoughts on
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social
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sites
.
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,
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some
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people
do not favor such facts. In my perception, I disagree with the latter
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point
. Though, the essay will focus on both sides and will reflect my opinion
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before
coming to the conclusion.

This paragraph will throw
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some
light on why it is beneficial to express our views on public
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sites
. To commence with, such applications
are considered
to be an amazing innovation of mankind. Due to post things by others can
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keep
everyone updated about what is happening across the globe.
For instance
, recent news about a lethal virus named coronavirus which has created a threat among humanity across the earth.
Hence
, to bring awareness among humankind
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social
networking applications such as Twitter, Snapchat, Facebook and
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many
more are offering a helping hand to the
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government
.
Moreover
, videos and safety messages
are shared
on such
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sites
to bring insight as
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soon
as possible.

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, a few argue that to reflect the
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ideas
and
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point
of view regarding anything may become controversial.
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, a few years ago a renowned former Indian cricket team captain
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sing
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Dhoni
was criticized
by Sanjay
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Manjrekar
on the
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platform, twitter.
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,
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some
devotees of
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Singh
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furious at him. Those words of Sanjay
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Manjrekar
had hurt the emotion of the fans.

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So
,
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some
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people
oppose utilizing such applications.
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, in my perception,
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positive
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points
are more
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compared to
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negative
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points
.
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, it is
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good
to share
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ideas
and thoughts on public sites.

To put in a nutshell, I would like to say that,
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social
media can be
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used
more looking forward to the safety of humankind
rather
than opposing it.
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21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is a good idea to express that point of view and ideas through social media. however, others believe the opposite. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
349 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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