Some people believe that it is essential to include physical education classes in the curriculum for all school age children. Others think that children's time is better spent on more academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.3
Some people believe that it is essential to include physical education classes in the curriculum for all school age children. Others think that children's time is better spent on more academic subjects. v. 3
Nowadays, physical activities are a part of our lives, they are inside of our routine and everybody needs them. School kids are not the exception, but some people prefer to give them more academic activities than sports. In this essay we will cover both points of views.
Some persons would like to provide activities related to academia, like science, physics, biology, among others, and keep aside sports. Although it is true that academic subjects are important for the education, children needs to play sports to improve their mobility and health.
The world has had an increase the obesity rate due to sedentary lifestyle, and unfortunately, kids are included
I think children must have physical education. They must be encouraged to play sports, to have an active life, because that is what is going to help them to develop a healthy lifestyle and it will reduce in the future this obesity rate. Also, this will help to increase blood oxygen and it will help to increase their memory.
In the other hand, children need to have different activities, while they spend most of their time in academic activities, they need a change to think about other things, to move all their bodies to improve their mobility.
In conclusion, is unacceptable that people think about giving kids more academic activities than physical ones, even more when we know that video games are making children taking a sedentary lifestyle. So what will happened if schools remove all physical activities? I think that obesity rate for children will be higher because now they won't care about their health if they don't learn about that in school.
Nowadays,
physical
activities
are a part of our
lives
, they are
inside of
our routine and everybody
needs
them. School kids are not the exception,
but
some
people
prefer to give them more
academic
activities
than
sports
. In this essay we will cover both points of views.
Some
persons would like to provide
activities
related to academia, like science, physics, biology, among others, and
keep
aside
sports
. Although it is true that
academic
subjects are
important
for the education,
children
needs
to play
sports
to
improve
their mobility and health.
The world has had an increase the obesity rate due to sedentary lifestyle, and unfortunately, kids
are included
I
think
children
must
have
physical
education. They
must
be encouraged
to play
sports
, to have an active life,
because
that is
what is going to
help
them to develop a healthy lifestyle and it will
reduce
in the future this obesity rate.
Also
, this will
help
to increase blood oxygen and it will
help
to increase their memory.
In the other hand,
children
need
to have
different
activities
, while they spend most of their time in
academic
activities
, they
need
a
change
to
think
about other things, to
move
all their bodies to
improve
their mobility.
In conclusion
, is unacceptable that
people
think
about giving kids more
academic
activities
than
physical
ones, even more when we know that video games are making
children
taking a sedentary lifestyle.
So
what will
happened
if schools remove all
physical
activities
? I
think
that obesity rate for
children
will be higher
because
now
they won't care about their health if they don't learn about that in school.
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