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Some people believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary schools. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v.1

Some people believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary schools. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1
Learning a new language, belonging to another land, is not an easy task. According to one group of people, students should be taught new tongues at primary schools while others think that secondary schools are the best place to learn a new language. This essay will discuss why primary schools are better than secondary schools to acquire the knowledge of language other than native one. First and foremost, children have more active brain in comparison to adults which could help them to process new information at faster rate. Moreover, they can be more fluent by imbibing all basics of another language such as lexical resource and pronunciation which would have been challenging otherwise for an adult. For instance, a person who always has been practicing his mother tongue could not resist its influence on words of new language while speaking. Secondly, when children start learning new language, cognitive abilities could be improved such as logical thinking, decision making and communication skills. To illustrate, as per the results from one survey conducted in the UK, children who know more languages can solve puzzles with more accuracy due to their faster decision making. Although pupils can get command on second language by learning it in secondary school, they would mix it up with their native language. Furthermore, they have to put more efforts not to adulterate their mother tongue. For instance, a native English speaker while taking Spanish language classes, should not make same ‘s’ sound in both languages. In conclusion, children can gain more benefits by learning a new language at younger age in comparison to later years of life. So they must get various classes at primary schools to become competent in different languages. In conclusion, children can gain more benefits by learning a new language at younger age in comparison to later years of life. So they must get various classes at primary schools to become competent in different languages.
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language
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people
, students should
be taught
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new
tongues at
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primary
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schools
while others
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think
that secondary
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schools
are the best place to learn a
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new
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language
. This essay will discuss why
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primary
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schools
are better than secondary
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schools
to acquire the knowledge of
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language
other than native one.

First
and foremost,
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children
have more active brain
in comparison
to adults which could
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help
them to process
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new
information at faster rate.
Moreover
, they can be more fluent by imbibing all basics of another
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language
such as lexical resource and pronunciation which would have been challenging
otherwise
for an adult.
For instance
, a person who
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always has been
practicing his mother tongue could not resist its influence on words of
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new
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language
while speaking.
Secondly
, when
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children
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start
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language
, cognitive abilities could be
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improved
such as logical thinking,
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decision making
and communication
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skills
. To illustrate, as per the results from one survey conducted in the UK,
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children
who know more
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languages
can solve puzzles with more accuracy due to their faster
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decision making
.

Although pupils can
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get
command on second
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language
by
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learning
it in secondary
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school
, they would mix it up with their native
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language
.
Furthermore
, they
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have to
put more efforts not to adulterate their mother tongue.
For instance
, a native English speaker while taking Spanish
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language
classes, should not
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make
same ‘s’ sound in both languages.

In conclusion
,
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children
can gain more benefits by
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learning
a
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new
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language
at younger age
in comparison
to later years of life.
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they
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various classes at
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schools
to become competent in
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different
languages.

In conclusion
,
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children
can gain more benefits by
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learning
a
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new
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language
at younger age
in comparison
to later years of life.
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they
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must
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get
various classes at
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primary
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schools
to become competent in
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different
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languages
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary schools. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
321 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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