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Many people support use of animals for testing medicines for humans. Others believe it isn’t appropriate to use animals for such experiments. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.10

Many people support use of animals for testing medicines for humans. Others believe it isn’t appropriate to use animals for such experiments. v. 10
From recent couple of decades humans have endured a dramatic shift in the advancements of medical technologies, and to do these trails scientists will often use animals at first. One portion of people supports this approach, while others are against this. This essay will attempt to study both the viewpoints and provide an opinion. One of the foremost important reasons to conduct these experiments on animals is the attributes of animals. Many animals have the same characteristics of humans and some have greater immunity power to sustain the composition of chemical compounds. As the animals which are involved in these trails are mostly cloned animals such as; monkeys, rats and sometimes frogs, reproducing these animals are easy. For example, it takes 1. 2 millimeters of tissue to clone a rat which is used in experiments. In brief, the variables of an animal which are almost identical to humans make that creature an ideal body to conduct experiments. On the other hand there are factions of people who are opposing use of terrestrial animal in medical trails. As the pain of humans and animals is same, the animals are been tortured in the name of experiments. Furthermore some animals are dying in the process of these medical analyses because of heavy use of reactive substances. It is said that one-third of wild monkeys are dies all around the world due to medical tests. One more point worth considering is that some animals are addicted to these medicines and cannot sustain without them, as a result they have several mental health problems. An addictive experiment that conducted on a chimpanzee showed a drastic change in the mental behavior of it when they stopped cigarettes. These are the ultra prominent reason for some people to oppose animals for medical testing. Weighing up both sides of the argument, some say that using animals for medical purpose ease the outcomes of the experiment and others say it is not appropriate to use animals as they are also living beings. As far as I am concerned, I stand on the same side of the experts, who say that for medical reason we should not use any animals. As technologies in medical field are swifting towards 10th generation and with all super computers we have now, we can able to test on years we can do testing on bio-artificial organisms
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humans
have endured a dramatic shift in the advancements of
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medical
technologies, and to do these trails scientists will
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often
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use
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animals
at
first
. One portion of
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people
supports this approach, while others are against this. This essay will attempt to study both the viewpoints and provide an opinion.

One of the foremost
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important
reasons to conduct these
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experiments
on
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animals
is the attributes of
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animals
.
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animals
have the same characteristics of
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humans
and
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some
have greater immunity power to sustain the composition of chemical compounds. As the
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animals
which
are involved
in these trails are
mostly
cloned
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animals
such as; monkeys, rats and
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sometimes
frogs, reproducing these
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animals
are easy.
For example
, it takes 1. 2 millimeters of tissue to clone a rat which is
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used
in
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experiments
.
In brief
, the variables of an
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animal
which are almost identical to
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humans
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make
that creature an ideal body to conduct experiments.

On the other hand
there are factions of
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people
who are opposing
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use
of terrestrial
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animal
in
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medical
trails. As the pain of
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humans
and
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animals
is same, the
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animals
are been
tortured in the name of
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experiments
.
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Furthermore
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some
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animals
are dying in the process of these
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medical
analyses
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because
of heavy
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use
of reactive substances. It
is said
that one-third of wild monkeys are
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dies
all around the world due to
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medical
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tests
. One more point worth considering is that
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some
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animals
are addicted
to these medicines and cannot sustain without them,
as a result
they have several mental health problems. An addictive
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experiment
that conducted on a chimpanzee
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showed
a drastic
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change
in the mental behavior of it when they
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stopped
cigarettes. These are the ultra prominent reason for
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some
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people
to oppose
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animals
for
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medical
testing.

Weighing up both sides of the argument,
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some
say that using
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animals
for
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medical
purpose
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ease
the outcomes of the
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experiment
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and others
say it is not appropriate to
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use
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animals
as they are
also
living beings. As far as I
am concerned
, I stand on the same side of the experts, who say that for
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medical
reason we should not
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use
any
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animals
. As technologies in
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medical
field are
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swifting
towards 10th generation and with all super computers we have
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now
, we
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can able to
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test
on years we can
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do testing
on bio-artificial
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organisms
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34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people support use of animals for testing medicines for humans. Others believe it isn’t appropriate to use animals for such experiments. v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
392 words
6.0
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