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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? v.11

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? v. 11
Most people would agree that car ownership has increased in recent years and is causing a range of problems, particularly in built-up areas. I think there are a number of ways that governments can aim to deal with this. Many big cities in the world have traffic problems, but these problems vary. For example, it is reasonably easy to drive around my city after 10 am and before 5 pm. However, outside these hours, you have to allow double the usual time to reach your destination. In some other cities, traffic is congested at all times, and there is the continual sound of automobile horns as people try to get wherever they want to go. One of the best approaches governments can take in busy cities is to encourage the use of public transport. This means the transport facilities have to be well run and people must be able to afford them. Buses, trams and trains are good ways of getting around, and if they are cheap and reliable, people will use them. By the way, Another approach is to discourage people from actually entering the city by building automobile parks and shopping centres on the outskirts. Many cities around the world do this quite successfully and offer passenger bus transport into the centre, if they need it. At peak travel periods, governments can also run campaigns to encourage people to be less dependent on their cars. Apparently, a lot of car trips involve very short journeys to, say, the supermarket or local school. These are often unnecessary, but we automatically get in our cars without thinking. Clearly we all have a responsibility to look after our cities. Governments can do a lot to improve the situation and part of what they do should involve encouraging individuals to consider alternatives to driving.
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that
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ownership has increased in recent years and is causing a range of problems,
particularly
in built-up areas. I
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think
there are a number of ways that
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governments
can aim to deal with this.

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big
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cities
in the world have traffic problems,
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but
these problems vary.
For example
, it is
reasonably
easy to drive around my city after 10 am and
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before
5 pm.
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allow
double the usual time to reach your destination. In
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some
other
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cities
, traffic
is congested
at all times, and there is the continual sound of automobile horns as
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people
try to
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get
wherever they want to go.

One of the best approaches
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governments
can take in busy
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cities
is to encourage the
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use
of public transport. This means the transport facilities
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have to
be well run and
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people
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must
be able to afford them. Buses, trams and trains are
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good
ways of getting around, and if they are
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cheap
and reliable,
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people
will
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use
them.

By the way, Another approach is to discourage
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people
from actually entering the city by building automobile parks and shopping
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centres
on the outskirts.
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cities
around the world do this quite
successfully
and offer passenger bus transport into the
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centre
, if they need it.

At peak travel periods,
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governments
can
also
run campaigns to encourage
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people
to be less dependent on their
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cars
.
Apparently
,
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a lot of
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car
trips involve
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very
short journeys to, say, the supermarket or local school. These are
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often
unnecessary,
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but
we
automatically
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get
in our
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cars
without thinking.

Clearly
we all have a responsibility to look after our
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cities
.
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Governments
can do a lot to
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improve
the situation and part of what they do should involve encouraging individuals to consider alternatives to driving.
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19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? v. 11

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
302 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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