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Some people believe that governments must apply high taxes to provide good public services for everyone. Give your opinion. v.1

Some people believe that governments must apply high taxes to provide good public services for everyone. Give your opinion. v. 1
Governments collect taxes to fund services such as education, health and infrastructure. Most people, me included, defend the idea that tax rates should be high enough so that these services can reach everyone adequately. Also in order to achieve and maintain high service quality, governments naturally require a lot of funding. Countries are not composed solely of cities, but also of rural areas, and it is the governments’ responsibility to provide public services in these areas as well. Reaching the rural areas is costly as it requires roads and bridges to be built in order to transport goods and people there. For example, a recent study calculated that healthcare cost per capita is %45 higher in villages compared to the urban areas. In light of this information, we need high taxes to extend the reach of public services to cover everyone in our country. Another reason why countries should impose high tax rate is that to maintain and improve the quality of services. Education and healthcare have extra importance on that matter as they are quite crucial for a country to improve and flourish. Statistics gathered from official worldwide showed that increasing investment in healthcare elevated life expectancy. So, in order to improve and maintain healthcare, or any public service in that matter, governments should be able to collect more money through higher taxes. In conclusion, I believe high tax rates are necessary as it is the only way to give rural areas with adequate public service. In addition, improvement and stability of these services can only be achieved through this way.
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such as education, health and infrastructure. Most
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people
, me included, defend the
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tax
rates should be
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high
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enough
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that these
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services
can reach everyone
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high
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service
quality,
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a lot of
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solely
of cities,
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governments’
responsibility to provide
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public
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services
in these
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. Reaching the rural
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areas
is costly as it requires roads and bridges to
be built
in order to transport
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, a recent study calculated that healthcare cost per capita is %45 higher in villages compared to the urban
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. In light of this information, we need
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taxes
to extend the reach of
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public
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services
to cover everyone in our country.

Another reason why countries should impose
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tax
rate is that to maintain and
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improve
the quality of
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services
. Education and healthcare have extra importance on that matter as they are quite crucial for a country to
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improve
and flourish. Statistics gathered from official worldwide
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showed
that increasing investment in healthcare elevated life expectancy.
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, in order to
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improve
and maintain healthcare, or any
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public
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service
in that matter,
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governments
should be able to collect more money through higher taxes.

In conclusion
, I believe
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high
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tax
rates are necessary as it is the
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only
way to give rural
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areas
with adequate
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public
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service
.
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, improvement and stability of these
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can
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only
be achieved
through this way.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that governments must apply high taxes to provide good public services for everyone. Give your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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