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In the modern world image is becoming a more powerful way of communication than the written world to what extend do you agree or disagree? v.1

In the modern world image is becoming a more powerful way of communication than the written world v. 1
The relative importance of power has always been a topic of debate whenever people discuss communication. Many believe that written massages can impress the readers more, while others believe that a picture can speak a thousand words. On the one hand, written messages can be considered as one of the most traditional methods of communication. Even though, they have been delivered by different means; such as, on papers, emails text messages, letters and so on, their effectiveness has helped them maintain their popularity throughout decades and centuries. By changing a few words, a simple sentence can be turned into a smart advertisement or motto which has the ability to impress thousands of people. A good case in point could be many outstanding quotes by famous writers and philosophers that have lasted through times and are still popular and have the power to move people. On the other hand, pictures can attract more sympathy and understanding. A good picture can deliver a powerful message. It can lead people to participate in different activities such as humanitarian and philanthropic ones due to feeling sympathetic toward subjects of the picture. If a person reads about war in a newspaper they may feel bad whereas, a picture of refugee’s situation can evoke their empathy like nothing else In conclusion, I believe that pictures and written messages are not mutually exclusive. A picture accompanied with a smart message has far more impact than just the picture or vice versa. Both, creating messages as well as capturing pictures, are considered as arts therefore, one will not omit the other one.
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people
discuss communication.
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can speak a thousand words.

On the one hand, written
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messages
can
be considered
as one of the most traditional methods of communication.
Even though
, they have
been delivered
by
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different
means; such as, on papers, emails text
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messages
, letters and
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so
on, their effectiveness has
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helped
them maintain their popularity throughout decades and centuries. By changing a few words, a simple sentence can
be turned
into a smart advertisement or motto which has the ability to impress thousands of
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people
. A
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good
case in point could be
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many
outstanding quotes by
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famous
writers and philosophers that have lasted through times and are
still
popular and have the power to
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move
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people
.

On the other hand
,
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pictures
can attract more sympathy and understanding. A
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good
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picture
can deliver a powerful
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message
. It can lead
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people
to participate in
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different
activities such as humanitarian and philanthropic ones due to feeling sympathetic toward subjects of the
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picture
. If a person reads about war in a newspaper they may feel
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bad
whereas, a
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picture
of refugee’s situation can evoke their empathy like nothing
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else


In conclusion
, I believe that
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pictures
and written
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messages
are not
mutually
exclusive. A
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picture
The usual collocation for "accompany" is "by," not "with." It is better to say this: "accompanied by".
accompanied with
a smart
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message
has far more impact than
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just
the
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picture
or vice versa. Both, creating
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messages
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as well as
capturing
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pictures
,
are considered
as arts
therefore
, one will not omit the other one.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay In the modern world image is becoming a more powerful way of communication than the written world v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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