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International tourism is now more common than ever before. Some feel that this is a positive trend, while others do not. Discuss both views and state your opinion v.3

International tourism is now more common than ever before. Some feel that this is a positive trend, while others do not. 3
With globalisation and cheaper flying costs, more people are now travelling International during vacation and public holidays. Many reckon that it is a welcoming phenomenon while others do not agree. This essay however agree with the idea of travelling abroad and we will discuss both the views in this essay, followed by a seasoned conclusion. Modern world today is booming with advancements in technology and global economy; consequently, high paid income and low air fare has raised the desire of how and where people want to travel. Instead of spending holidays somewhere around the country, vast majority of public now prefer to travel international countries. The major benefits of this trend are economic and social benefits. This is to say, tourists in various countries become the economic drivers as local businesses and local markets flourish with more tourists coming to their country. Moreover, countries which promote tourism and welcome more international tourists is comparatively safer and convenient for people as government ensure positive global image of their country. For example, despite low population and less opportunities for industrialisation, Jammu and Kashmir is second most economically stable state in India because it witness around half million International tourist every year. During the public holidays, a large number of people travel to a very few international countries, namely Switzerland, Thailand, Bangkok and Bali, which are highly promoted by all travel agencies. As a result, local residents become overwhelmed by the tourists coming in every day during holidays and thus disturb their livelihood and environment. In fact, countries and places which were once quiet and clean, turn around and become loud and unhygienic due to international tourists, who are not aware of how the locals live. For instance, international tourists dump 1 quintal of plastic bottles every year during their visit to Rajasthan, India. In conclusion, international tourism if on one hand boost a country's economy then on the other hand, it disturb the lifestyle of local people in that country. In my opinion, government should be obliged to spend a proportion of profit from tourism on various campaigns and advertisements to make International tourists more aware about locals and their needs.
With
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globalisation
and cheaper flying costs, more
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people
are
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now
travelling
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International
during vacation and public
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holidays
.
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Many
reckon that it is a welcoming phenomenon while others do not
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agree
. This essay
however
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agree
with the
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idea
of travelling
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abroad and
we will discuss both the views in this essay, followed by a seasoned conclusion.

Modern world
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today
is booming with advancements in technology and global economy;
consequently
, high paid income and low air fare has raised the desire of how and where
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people
want to
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travel
.
Instead
of spending
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holidays
somewhere around the
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country
,
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vast majority of
public
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now
prefer to
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travel
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international
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countries
. The major benefits of this trend are economic and social benefits. This is to say,
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tourists
in various
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countries
become the economic drivers as
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local
businesses and
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local
markets flourish with more
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tourists
coming to their
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country
.
Moreover
,
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countries
which promote tourism and welcome more
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international
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tourists
is
comparatively
safer and convenient for
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people
as
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government
ensure
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positive
global image of their
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country
.
For example
, despite low population and
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less
opportunities for
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industrialisation
,
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Jammu
and Kashmir is second most
economically
stable state in India
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because
it
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witness
around half million
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International
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tourist
every year.

During the public
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holidays
,
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a large number of
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people
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travel
to a
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very
few
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international
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countries
,
namely
Switzerland, Thailand, Bangkok and Bali, which are
highly
promoted by all
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travel
agencies.
As a result
,
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local
residents become overwhelmed by the
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tourists
coming in every day during
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holidays
and
thus
disturb their livelihood and environment. In fact,
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countries
and places which were once quiet and clean, turn around and become loud and unhygienic due to
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international
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tourists
, who are not aware of how the
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locals
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live
.
For instance
,
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international
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tourists
dump 1
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quintal
of plastic bottles every year during their visit to Rajasthan, India.

In conclusion
,
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international
tourism if on one hand boost a country's economy then
on the other hand
, it
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disturb
the lifestyle of
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local
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people
in that
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country
. In my opinion,
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government
should
be obliged
to spend a proportion of profit from tourism on various campaigns and advertisements to
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make
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International
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tourists
more aware about
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locals
and their needs.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes
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IELTS essay International tourism is now more common than ever before. Some feel that this is a positive trend, while others do not. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
359 words
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