Spending money by government in right sectors for the development of a nation has always been a challenging decision. It is asserted by some people that it would be wastage of financial resources, if money is spent on entertainment resources, rather a significant amount of money should be spent to provide medical care and education facilities to people. I disagree with the notion and intend to discuss my views in the following paragraphs.
On the one hand, it is believed that education and health care is the basic necessity and plays a vital role in growth of a country. This is because education creates better career opportunities and good healthcare facilities make sure every citizen is fit and healthy. Hence, employed and fit individuals not only enjoy myriad benefits of life, but also contribute to nation`s development by paying taxes. However, entertainment and sports are also providing a lot of career paths to youngsters and as well as are necessary to break monotony of daily life to have fun, which is equally important.
To conclude, although education and medical care are important in terms of essential requirements for life, I believe importance of sports and entertainment industry can not be ignored as these sectors are also playing a key role for the development of people by providing employment opportunities, huge contribution to nation`s economy and making people`s life cheerful.
Spending money by
government
in right sectors for the development of a nation has always been a challenging decision. It
is asserted
by
some
people
that it would be wastage of financial resources, if money
is spent
on entertainment resources,
rather
a significant amount of money should
be spent
to provide medical care and
education
facilities to
people
. I disagree with the notion and intend to discuss my views in the following paragraphs.
On the one hand, it
is believed
that
education
and health care is the basic necessity and plays a vital role in growth of a country. This is
because
education
creates better career opportunities and
good
healthcare facilities
make
sure every citizen
is fit
and healthy.
Hence
, employed and fit individuals not
only
enjoy myriad benefits of
life
,
but
also
contribute to
nation`s
development by paying taxes.
However
, entertainment and sports are
also
providing
a lot of
career paths to youngsters and
as well
as are necessary to break monotony of daily
life
to have fun, which is
equally
important
.
To conclude
, although
education
and medical care are
important
in terms of essential requirements for
life
, I believe importance of sports and entertainment industry can not be
ignored
as these sectors are
also
playing a key role for the development of
people
by providing employment opportunities, huge contribution to
nation`s
economy and making
people`s
life
cheerful.
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12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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