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TOPIC # 57 Some movies are seriously designed to make the audience think. Other movies are primarily to amuse and entertain. Which type of movie do you prefer? v.2

TOPIC # 57 Some movies are seriously designed to make the audience think. Other movies are primarily to amuse and entertain. Which type of movie do you prefer? v. 2
Each kind of movies has its own fans and viewers, however comedies, thrillers, and sitcoms are more popular with different segments of the society. I definitely prefer to enjoy the entertaining movies for the following reasons. First and foremost, serious movies might not be to taste of everyone. But many people including children, juveniles, adults, and also elders usually are excited about watching amusing ones. Especially, when family members have assembled to spend a quality time together, entertaining movies are largely the first choice to watch as it is suitable for everyone. They can laugh, connect with each other, and make an enjoyable atmosphere. In contrast, a serious movie demands a very serious atmosphere without any noise and interruptions so its viewers can concentrate and get the general message of the movie. Secondly, after a long day working or studying, watching an entertaining movie can be very relaxing. It can take our mind off the daily troubles, and the only thing we have to do is just to sit back or recline while we are eating snacks, and watch it. For example, every time I get exhausted of studying, I watch an episode of “Two and a half men” TV series for diversion. It relieves my nervous strain because I laugh a lot. Then, I can resume studying more energetically. Last but not least, most of comedies or sitcoms are also to make the audience think and reconsider. They are entertaining and funny, but they also deliver some messages in jests. Social shortcomings, family problems, or mannerism are often the subject of this kind of movies. They use humor, so as not to offend anyone, to promote public awareness about daily and common inappropriate behaviors and habits. For instance, the “Two and a half men” TV series points out that how self-centered manner, heavy drinking, and irresponsibility may impact the whole life of a person, and prevent him from settling down. To sum it up, I believe amusing movies are more proper to watch with family members at spare times, they can soothe the nerves, and they also might be instructive as much as they are entertaining.
Each kind of
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movies
has its
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own
fans and viewers,
however
comedies, thrillers, and sitcoms are more popular with
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different
segments of the society. I definitely prefer to enjoy the
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entertaining
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movies
for the following reasons.

First
and foremost, serious
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movies
might not be to taste of everyone.
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But
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many
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people
including children, juveniles, adults, and
also
elders
usually
are excited
about watching amusing ones.
Especially
, when family members have assembled to spend a quality time together,
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entertaining
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movies
are
largely
the
first
choice to
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watch
as it is suitable for everyone. They can laugh, connect with each other, and
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make
an enjoyable atmosphere.
In contrast
, a serious
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movie
demands a
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very
serious atmosphere without any noise and interruptions
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so
its viewers can concentrate and
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get
the general message of the movie.

Secondly
, after a long day working or studying, watching an
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entertaining
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movie
can be
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very
relaxing. It can take our mind off the daily troubles, and the
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only
thing we
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have to
do is
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just
to sit back or recline while we are eating snacks, and
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watch
it.
For example
, every time I
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get
exhausted of studying, I
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watch
an episode of “Two and a half
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men
” TV series for diversion. It relieves my nervous strain
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because
I laugh a lot. Then, I can resume studying more
energetically
.

Last
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but
not least,
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most of comedies
or sitcoms are
also
to
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make
the audience
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think
and reconsider. They are
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entertaining
and
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funny
,
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but
they
also
deliver
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some
messages in jests. Social shortcomings, family problems, or mannerism are
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often
the subject of this kind of
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movies
. They
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use
humor,
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so
as not to offend anyone, to promote public awareness about daily and common inappropriate behaviors and habits.
For instance
, the “Two and a half
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
men
” TV series points out that how self-centered manner, heavy drinking, and irresponsibility may impact the whole life of a person, and
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prevent
him from settling down.

To sum it up, I believe amusing
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movies
are more proper to
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watch
with family members at spare times, they can soothe the nerves, and they
also
might be instructive as much as they are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
entertaining
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay TOPIC # 57 Some movies are seriously designed to make the audience think. Other movies are primarily to amuse and entertain. Which type of movie do you prefer? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
357 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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