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Some people believe that free housing should be provided by the government for under-privileged and people who can’t afford to buy a house. To what extent do you agree and disagree with the statement? Give examples based on your own experience. v.1

Some people believe that free housing should be provided by the government for under-privileged and people who can’t afford to buy a house. Give examples based on your own experience. v. 1
Nowadays, a lot of debate is going on regarding the government's responsiblity towards under-privileged people. Some argue that they should provide free housing for those who cannot afford to buy a house and I completely agree with this. On the one hand, some people believe that it is the resposibility of every individual to take care of themselves including having their own home. They say the government should treat everyone equal and hence should not provide any special benefits for housing because someone is poor and is not capable. Moreover, since the money comes from the taxes that are paid by the citizens and belongs to all the people, it ought to be used for public benefits. Besides, high priorities should be given to issues like national security and building roads and railways that are beneficial for the whole society. Nevertheless, they see owning a house as a choice rather than a necessity. On the other hand, another group of people are of the opinion that every government has the responsibility to provide shelter for those who are financially weak and incapable. Firstly, most of the nations are under-developled or developing and majority of people are working hard even to earn meal for one time. Besides, they are uneducated and do not have a well paying job. Hence, owning a house becomes a distant dream. Secondly, the authorities should take care of every individual and it is their duty to protect the poor. By poviding shelter, they are making their families safe from natural disasters and criminals, thereby making their life better. Also, since the society is biased and there is no way for a poor to become rich, unless governments provide basic facilities like this for helping them, they can never achieve anything in life. To conclude, protection of a house is something that every individual deserves and sometimes people are not able to afford it. In my opinion, although government funds has their own priorities and need, they should be responsibile for uplifting lower class people and free housing is the least they can do for the same.
Nowadays,
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a lot of
debate is going on regarding the
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government
's
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responsiblity
towards under-privileged
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people
.
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Some
argue that they should
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provide
free housing for those who cannot afford to
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buy
a
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house
and I completely
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agree
with this.

On the one hand,
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some
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people
believe that it is the
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resposibility
of every individual to take care of themselves including having their
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own
home. They say the
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government
should treat everyone equal and
hence
should not
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provide
any special benefits for housing
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because
someone is poor and is not capable.
Moreover
, since the money
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comes
from the taxes that
are paid
by the citizens and belongs to all the
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people
, it ought to be
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used
for public benefits.
Besides
, high priorities should be
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given
to issues like national security and building roads and railways that are beneficial for the whole society.
Nevertheless
, they
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see
owning a
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house
as a choice
rather
than a necessity.

On the other hand
, another group of
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people
are of the opinion that every
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government
has the responsibility to
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provide
shelter for those who are
financially
weak and incapable.
Firstly
, most of the nations are
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under-developled
or developing and
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majority of
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people
are working
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hard
even to earn meal for one time.
Besides
, they
are uneducated
and do not have a well paying job.
Hence
, owning a
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house
becomes a distant dream.
Secondly
, the authorities should take care of every individual and it is their duty to protect the poor. By
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poviding
shelter, they are making their families safe from natural disasters and criminals, thereby making their life better.
Also
, since the society
is biased
and there is no way for a poor to become rich, unless
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governments
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
provide
basic facilities like this for helping them, they can never achieve anything in life.

To conclude
, protection of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
is something that every individual deserves and
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sometimes
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people
are not able to afford it. In my opinion, although
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government
funds has their
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own
priorities and need, they should be
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responsibile
for uplifting lower
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class
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people
and free housing is the least they can do for the same.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that free housing should be provided by the government for under-privileged and people who can’t afford to buy a house. Give examples based on your own experience. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
350 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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