Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Some people believe that free housing should be provided by the government for the under-privileged and people who cannot afford to buy a house. To what extent do you agree or disagree. v.1

Some people believe that free housing should be provided by the government for the under-privileged and people who cannot afford to buy a house. v. 1
It is argued that needy and poor people ought to be provided with housing facilities by the officials. This essay agrees with that statement because it can help in lowering the stress of owning shelter and can focus on other major issues, and it can help in maintaining the happiness index which helps in solving various health ailments. Humans do hard work diligently for buying a house so that their loved ones can live securely. This is the primary reason for which major requirements such as child education is ignored by the people living below the poverty line. As a result, it hinders the overall development of the nation. Children in low-income families are forced to work at a young age so that their income can add some value in building the roof for the family. For example, in developing nations like Bangladesh, more than 55% of individuals do not have a home and their focus is to own a house by compromising the education and health of their offspring. Another reason why no-cost housing should be given to the people who could not afford is that it can help in lowering the stress which most people carry in their whole life. This as a consequence, can boost the happiness score and improve the health of the country. In many growing states, the major concern in health is hypertension, heart attacks and high blood pressure due to the pressure of constructing a secured home. For instance, the ratio of people who are healthy and happy in Switzerland is more than 75% because the government is primarily focused on developing new homes for needy ones and provides full support in lowering the stress involved. In conclusion, house is a basic need for every human and the government should take proper steps in developing societies for poor people so that the men and women can shed some light on child education and people can live happier without tensions.
It
is argued
that needy and poor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
ought to
be provided
with housing facilities by the officials. This essay
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agrees
with that statement
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
in lowering the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
of owning shelter and can focus on other major issues, and it can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
in maintaining the happiness index which
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
helps
in solving various
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
ailments.

Humans do
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
work
diligently
for buying a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
loved
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ones
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
securely
. This is the primary reason for which major requirements such as child education is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignored
by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
living below the poverty line.
As a result
, it hinders the
overall
development of the nation. Children in low-income families
are forced
to work at a young age
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that their income can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
add
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
value in building the roof for the family.
For example
, in developing nations like Bangladesh, more than 55% of individuals do not have a home and their focus is to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
by compromising the education and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
of their offspring.

Another reason why no-cost housing should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who could not afford is that it can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
in lowering the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
which most
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
carry in their whole life. This as a consequence, can boost the happiness score and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
of the country. In
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
growing states, the major concern in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
is hypertension, heart attacks and high blood pressure due to the pressure of constructing a secured home.
For instance
, the ratio of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who are healthy and happy in Switzerland is more than 75%
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
is
primarily
focused on developing new homes for needy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ones
and provides full support in lowering the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
involved.

In conclusion
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
is a basic need for every human and the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should take proper steps in developing societies for poor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
men
and women can shed
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
light on child education and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
happier without tensions.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
You can never understand one language until you understand at least two.
Geoffrey Willans

IELTS essay Some people believe that free housing should be provided by the government for the under-privileged and people who cannot afford to buy a house. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
326 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts