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Some people work for the same organization all their working life. others think it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both views and give your opinion v.3

Some people work for the same organization all their working life. others think it is better to work for different organizations. 3
While some people believe that it is more advantageous to work for different organizations, others only want to have a stable job in the same organization all their working life. From my perspective, each way has certain advantages and disadvantages that I am going to discuss in this essay. On the one hand, working for different organizations can benefit an employee in various aspects. New challenges at a new workplace can bring out his or her potential capability of working and creative thinking. Once these talents are known, the person might know which working position is the most appropriate for him or her. Furthermore, changing working environments gives people chances to get a job with a telephone figure salary and satisfaction. It is a well-known fact that you might not get a satisfying job for the first time you find but in the second or later tries. On the other hand, the changes may take you a lot of time to adapt. You may meet a variety of difficulties to be familiar with a new job and need weeks, even months, to remember your new colleagues and to have an effective collaboration with them. Meanwhile, steady career in an organization has several advantages. You do not need to pay time and attention to looking for a new position anywhere. In addition, with working experiences cultivated through years of working in such a workplace, you are easy to be promoted and to achieve high positions in your career. Nevertheless, doing the same job during many years may keep people from motivation and creative thinking. You will inevitably have the sense of un-fulfilment and un-satisfaction given by such monotonous and repetitive tasks and, as a result, it is hard for you to enjoy your time at the workplace. To conclude, I believe that both ways have advantages and disadvantages and think that, no matter which way you choose, job satisfaction is one of the most important things to take into consideration.
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some
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believe that it is more advantageous to work for
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different
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organizations
, others
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only
want to have a stable
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job
in the same
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organization
all their
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working
life. From my perspective, each way has certain advantages and disadvantages that I am going to discuss in this essay.

On the one hand,
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working
for
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different
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organizations
can benefit an employee in various aspects.
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New
challenges at a
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new
workplace can bring out
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his or her
potential capability of
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working
and creative thinking. Once these talents
are known
, the person might know which
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working
position is the most appropriate for him or her.
Furthermore
, changing
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working
environments gives
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people
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chances
to
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a
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job
with a telephone figure salary and satisfaction.
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you might not
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get
a satisfying
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job
for the
first
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time
you find
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in the second or later tries.
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, the
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changes
may take you
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a lot of
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time
to adapt. You may
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meet
a variety of difficulties to be familiar with a
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new
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job
and need weeks, even months, to remember your
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new
colleagues and to have an effective collaboration with them.

Meanwhile, steady career in an
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organization
has several advantages. You do not need to pay
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time
and attention to looking for a
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new
position anywhere.
In addition
, with
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working
experiences cultivated through years of
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working
in such a workplace, you are easy to
be promoted
and to achieve high positions in your career.
Nevertheless
, doing the same
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job
during
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many
years may
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keep
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people
from motivation and creative thinking. You will
inevitably
have the sense of
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un-fulfilment
and
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un-satisfaction
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given
by such monotonous and repetitive tasks and,
as a result
, it is
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hard
for you to enjoy your
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time
at the workplace.

To conclude
, I believe that both ways have advantages and disadvantages and
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think
that, no matter which way you choose,
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job
satisfaction is one of the most
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important
things to take into consideration.
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IELTS essay Some people work for the same organization all their working life. others think it is better to work for different organizations. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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