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Some people believe that first-year college students should live in a dormbuilding that homes only freshmen. Others may prefer the idea thatfirst-year students must live together with students in 2nd, 3rd, or even 4thgrade. Which opinion do you agree with v.1

Some people believe that first-year college students should live in a dormbuilding that homes only freshmen. Others may prefer the idea thatfirst-year students must live together with students in 2nd, 3rd, or even 4thgrade. Which opinion do you agree with v. 1
Education is that peddle of boat without this it is not feasible for people cross the river of success. Therefore, the dilemma regarding the study now has become a controversial issue among the folks. Some people vocalise that school should impart study in mixed classes. Counterpart, argue that schools should separate pupils according to their ability. To prior my viewpoint, I will delineate both aspects. According to people who advocate that study in a single class will be advantageous for scholars. They ponder that some learners are not sagacious in their study and if they will get a chance to study together with intelligent students. As they can get motivation from them as well as can also learn something new from them. Moreover, if all students will study under a one roof, then it will be beneficial for all students because as every student can share their experience in which ability he or she is perfect. Like, if a student is best dancer then they can teach to others. As every student may can ameliorate themselves in different abilities. On the other hand, due to some reasons people argue that study in a single class is not remarkable idea. Chiefly, mostly tutor identical methodology in class for imparting an education to all students. As students who are smart in a study they can understand, but dull pupil encounter many hurdles while study time. Hence, schools should provide a study in separate class according to performance of students as everyone student can get special attention from tutors. Furthermore, when dull students look at the performance of sagacious students then they feel embarrassed. Owing to which they face difficulties to concentrate on their studies To recapitulate, after analysing the entire writing. I concluded that study in mixed class is more affective than separate class.
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people
cross the river of success.
Therefore
, the dilemma regarding the
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study
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now
has become a controversial issue among the folks.
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Some
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people
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that school should impart
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study
in mixed
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classes
. Counterpart, argue that schools should separate pupils according to their ability. To prior my viewpoint, I will delineate both aspects.

According to
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people
who advocate that
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study
in a single
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class
will be advantageous for scholars. They ponder that
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some
learners are not sagacious in their
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study
and if they will
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get
a chance to
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study
together with intelligent
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students
. As they can
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get
motivation from them
as well
as can
also
learn something new from them.
Moreover
, if all
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students
will
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study
under a one roof, then it will be beneficial for all
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students
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because
as every
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student
can share their experience in which ability he or she is perfect. Like, if a
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student
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is best
dancer then they can teach to others.
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As
every
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student
may can ameliorate themselves in
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different
abilities.

On the other hand
, due to
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some
reasons
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people
argue that
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study
in a single
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class
is not remarkable
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idea
.
Chiefly
,
mostly
tutor identical methodology in
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class
for imparting an education to all
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students
. As
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students
who are smart in a
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study
they can understand,
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but
dull pupil encounter
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many
hurdles while
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study
time.
Hence
, schools should provide a
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study
in separate
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class
according to performance of
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students
as everyone
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student
can
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get
special attention from tutors.
Furthermore
, when dull
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students
look at the performance of sagacious
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students
then they feel embarrassed. Owing to which they face difficulties to concentrate on their studies

To recapitulate, after
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analysing
the entire writing. I concluded that
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study
in mixed
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
is more affective than separate
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class
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that first-year college students should live in a dormbuilding that homes only freshmen. Others may prefer the idea thatfirst-year students must live together with students in 2nd, 3rd, or even 4thgrade. Which opinion do you agree with v. 1

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
302 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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