Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Some people believe that face to face communication is always more powerful than written communication To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement Give your own opinion and include relevant examples v.1

Some people believe that face to face communication is always more powerful than written communication with this statement Give your own opinion and include relevant examples v. 1
Some parents whose children study in private school believe that should not pay dues that back up the governmental school. I completely disagree with this idea. Firstly, most countries impose the same tariff conditions on their citizens, regardless of their disbursement. Paying their children's tuition fees from their income is not a basis for tax exemption. Secondly, people pay taxes to live in a healthy and safe society and the government works to build this society. The most important step in doing this is to educate people. For instance, Winston Churchill, who was Prime Minister of the United Kingdom, said that If you want to reduce taxes you should be prepared to live in a less safe society. Finally, if wealthy families were given a tax discount for sending their children to private schools, poorer people should pay higher taxes than the rich. This could create an unfair tax system and widen the gap between rich and poor. It is true that the people, who have had private schools during their school time, are found more intelligent and successful than the people who had completed their education through government schools. The curriculum of private schools is extensive than public school. However, an example of high quality public education system can be seen Germany, where parents do not have to pay tuition. To conclude, it appears that every citizen, no matter whether they send their children to public or private schools, should pay the tax to contribute to enhancing the education system of the country.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
parents whose children study in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
private
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
believe that should not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pay
dues that back up the governmental
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
. I completely disagree with this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
.

Firstly
, most countries impose the same tariff conditions on their citizens, regardless of their disbursement. Paying their children's tuition fees from their income is not a basis for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tax
exemption.
Secondly
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pay
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
taxes
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in a healthy and safe society and the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
works to build this society. The most
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
step in doing this is to educate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
.
For instance
, Winston Churchill, who was Prime Minister of the United Kingdom, said that If you want to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
taxes
you should
be prepared
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in a less safe society.
Finally
, if wealthy families were
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tax
discount for sending their children to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
private
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
, poorer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
should
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pay
higher
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
taxes
than the rich. This could create an unfair
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tax
system and widen the gap between rich and poor.

It is true that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
, who have had
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
private
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
during their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
time,
are found
more intelligent and successful than the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who had completed their education through
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
. The curriculum of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
private
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
is
Use "(extensive)" to make a comparison with this adjective.
extensive
than public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
.
However
, an example of high quality public education system can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
Germany, where parents do not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pay
tuition.

To conclude
, it appears that every citizen, no matter whether they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
their children to public or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
private
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
, should
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pay
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tax
to contribute to enhancing the education system of the country.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that face to face communication is always more powerful than written communication with this statement Give your own opinion and include relevant examples v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts