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The man expresses his opinion of the university's plan. State his opinion and explain the reasons he gives for holding that opinion. v.1

The man expresses his opinion of the university's plan. State his opinion and explain the reasons he gives for holding that opinion. v. 1
Appropriate accommodation has become a considerable issue in the metropolis. People conceive that the habitation scarcity poses a dire repercussion to the society, and only the law making body can fix this concern. I completely align to this thought. In this essay we will discuss the view from both the shores and will draw an inference. Housing shortages in cities are raising questions of quality living. Urban areas have big real estate groups, which function in the private sector. Although, they provide luxury living in the most prime locations, but again, it becomes an affair of riches, yet leaving the majority of the population in those areas with dearth of a living space. These private companies work on heavy profit margins, however, many a times they lack in quality standards also. A report by Mckinsey on Indian private real estate states that these giants sell the houses at 25% inflated rates to common people, and in addition to this, four out of every ten houses delivered, are rejected in audits. Hence, handling construction in metros by private builders is definitely contentious. Who has the right potential to resolve this crunch? It is believed that government is the best agency to intervene in this field. Since, law making body works in the public interest, therefore, they are most suitable to find a way to this concern. Additionally, these bodies are well aware of the detailed planning of their space, as a result, the reevaluation of the construction projects, and further area development planning becomes practically easier for them. To illustrate, in countries like the US, where the law making body takes the charge of their area architecture, the most congested cities like New York also comes in well planned cities in world ranking by global auditing companies. So, the union of the metro can really sort the issue in interest of its people. To recapitulate, having mulled over above stated information and deliberating all the facts, it can be deducted that, unless the legislation do not control the housing of their range, the pernicious social effects of this scarcity can not be overcome. In my opinion, even if the private organizations continue to build living spaces, the public sector should take the overall charge of the development to ensure the optimal growth in living trait in cities. Additionally, the government should monitor these activities on a regular basis to ascertain that right execution is being done.
Appropriate accommodation has become a considerable issue in the metropolis.
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People
conceive that the habitation scarcity poses a dire repercussion to the society, and
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only
the law making
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body
can
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fix
this concern. I completely align to this
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thought
. In this essay we will discuss the view from both the shores and will draw an inference.

Housing shortages in
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cities
are raising questions of quality
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living
. Urban
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areas
have
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big
real estate groups, which function in the
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private
sector. Although, they provide luxury
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living
in the most prime locations,
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but
again, it becomes an affair of riches,
yet
leaving the majority of the population in those
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areas
with dearth of a
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living
space. These
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private
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companies
work on heavy profit margins,
however
,
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many
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a times
they lack in quality standards
also
. A report by
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Mckinsey
on Indian
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private
real estate states that these giants sell the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
at 25% inflated rates to common
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
, and
in addition
to this, four out of every ten
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houses
delivered,
are rejected
in audits.
Hence
, handling construction in metros by
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private
builders is definitely contentious.

Who has the right potential to resolve this crunch? It
is believed
that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
is the best agency to intervene in this field. Since, law making
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body
works in the public interest,
therefore
, they are most suitable to find a way to this concern.
Additionally
, these
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bodies
are well aware of the detailed planning of their space,
as a result
, the reevaluation of the construction projects, and
further
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
development planning becomes
practically
easier for them. To illustrate, in countries like the US, where the law making
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
body
takes the charge of their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
architecture, the most congested
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cities
like New York
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
in well planned
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cities
in world ranking by global auditing
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companies
.
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So
, the union of the metro can
really
sort the issue in interest of its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.

To recapitulate, having mulled over above stated information and deliberating all the facts, it can
be deducted
that, unless the legislation do not control the housing of their range, the pernicious social effects of this scarcity can not
be overcome
. In my opinion, even if the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
private
organizations continue to build
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
living
spaces, the public sector should take the
overall
charge of the development to ensure the optimal growth in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
living
trait in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cities
.
Additionally
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should monitor these activities on a regular basis to ascertain that right execution is
being done
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay The man expresses his opinion of the university's plan. State his opinion and explain the reasons he gives for holding that opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
405 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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