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Some people believe that face to face communication is always more powerful than written communication. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your own opinion and include relevant examples. v.2

Some people believe that face to face communication is always more powerful than written communication. with this statement? Give your own opinion and include relevant examples. v. 2
Even though it is true that almost all the entrepreneurs deal in written form either by the dint of emails or on paper as business deals include a huge amount of money matters, it is noticed that sometimes, things cannot be achieved by a mere letter or message as it requires more efforts which could only be possible by talking directly to the person. Facial expression and emotions, more often than not, are more likely to be value added since it helps the person to deliver the message in a more effective way that assists the listener to understand any situation exactly. For instance, it is a fact that a salesman can allure more customers, only if he interacts directly to them rather than sending interrupting online advertisements which are usually ignored by people. Furthermore, face to face interaction, undoubtedly, strengthens social relations and bonding among society members from all walks of life. This happens only due to in-person meetings which bestow an opportunity to people to talk in a better way, being known to each other, people generally tend to meet again and again. These direct conversations can bring people a closer relationship. To exemplify, in stark contrast, social media conversations, in fact, end up after the small span in comparison to the face to face dealings which are highly likely to change in a successful bond in the long run. To summarise, direct communication not only add immense value in conversation, but also expand social circle of people dramatically, despite the fact that significant documents are needed in some particular circumstances.
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it is true that almost all the entrepreneurs deal in written form either by the dint of emails or on paper as business deals include a huge amount of money matters, it
is noticed
that
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sometimes
, things cannot
be achieved
by a mere letter or message as it requires more efforts which could
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only
be possible by talking
directly
to the person. Facial expression and emotions, more
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often
than not, are more likely to be value
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added
since it
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helps
the person to deliver the message in a more effective way that assists the listener to understand any situation exactly.
For instance
, it is a fact that a salesman can allure more customers,
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only
if he interacts
directly
to them
rather
than sending interrupting online advertisements which are
usually
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ignored
by
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people
.

Furthermore
,
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face
to
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face
interaction,
undoubtedly
, strengthens social relations and bonding among society members from all walks of life. This happens
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only
due to in-person meetings which bestow an opportunity to
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people
to talk in a better way,
being known
to each other,
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people
generally
tend to
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meet
again and again. These direct conversations can bring
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people
a closer relationship. To exemplify, in stark contrast, social media conversations, in fact,
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end
up after the
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small
span
in comparison
to the
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face
to
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face
dealings which are
highly
likely to
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change
in a successful bond in the long run.

To
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summarise
, direct communication not
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only
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add
immense value in conversation,
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but
also
expand social circle of
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people
dramatically
, despite the fact that significant documents
are needed
in
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some
particular circumstances.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that face to face communication is always more powerful than written communication. with this statement? Give your own opinion and include relevant examples. v. 2

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
263 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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