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Some people believe that environmental problems can be solved by increasing the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree v.1

Some people believe that environmental problems can be solved by increasing the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. v. 1
Environmental problem has become a major issue in both developed and undeveloped countries. Some individuals share the view that this problems can be reduced by raising the cost of petrol for cars and other vehicles. I strongly agree with this view because this would result in less cars on the road leading to less environmental hazards such as smoke inhalation and also lead to increase economy. Uplifting the cost of fuel for cars to reduce environmental problems would be a means to an end. In other words, this act will reduce the amount of individuals who can afford petroleum thereby reducing the number of cars on the road, thus reducing air pollution. Take for instance, in Nigeria, a liter of petrol is about 300 naira, which is above the minimum wage of most individuals in the country. This act alone has reduced the number of cars, which in turn has reduced the environmental problems in the country. In addition, increment of petroleum will also improve the economy of the country. Thus, improving the environment. Many countries have developed their economical status solely on the increase of petroleum and gas which in turn has decreased environmental hazards. Take for example, China, who in 2017, was recorded as the country with the ‘purest air to breathe’ by the World Health Organization. This was mainly achieved because the Chinese government increased fuel prices back in 2015 and these extra funds were diverted to other transportation systems which in directly reduced environmental hazards. If the government would raise the cost of fuel and divert the extra funds to other means of transportation this would reduce environmental problems. In conclusion, increment of fuel prices would aid in the eradication of environmental pollution which can be harmful to the health of the citizens as well as the globe as a whole.
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countries
.
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Some
individuals share the view that
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this
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problems
can be
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reduced
by raising the cost of petrol for
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cars
and
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other
vehicles. I
strongly
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agree
with this view
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because
this would result in
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less
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cars
on the road leading to less
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environmental
hazards such as smoke inhalation and
also
lead to increase economy.

Uplifting the cost of
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fuel
for
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cars
to
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reduce
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environmental
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problems
would be a means to an
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end
. In
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other
words, this act will
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reduce
the amount of individuals who can afford petroleum thereby reducing the number of
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cars
on the road,
thus
reducing air pollution. Take
for instance
, in Nigeria, a liter of petrol is about 300
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naira
, which is above the minimum wage of most individuals in the
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country
. This act alone has
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reduced
the number of
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cars
, which in turn has
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reduced
the
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environmental
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problems
in the country.

In addition
, increment of petroleum will
also
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improve
the economy of the
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country
.
Thus
, improving the environment.
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countries
have developed their
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economical
status
solely
on the increase of petroleum and gas which in turn has decreased
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environmental
hazards. Take
for example
, China, who in 2017,
was recorded
as the
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country
with the ‘purest air to breathe’ by the World Health Organization. This was
mainly
achieved
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because
the Chinese
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government
increased
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fuel
prices back in 2015 and these extra funds
were diverted
to
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other
transportation systems which in
directly
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reduced
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environmental
hazards. If the
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government
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would raise
the cost of
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fuel
and divert the extra funds to
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other
means of transportation this would
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reduce
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environmental
problems.

In conclusion
, increment of
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fuel
prices would aid in the eradication of
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environmental
pollution which can be harmful to the health of the citizens
as well
as the globe as a whole.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that environmental problems can be solved by increasing the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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