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Some people believe that environmental problems can be solved by increasing the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree v.3

Some people believe that environmental problems can be solved by increasing the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. v. 3
Recently, mankind has been faced with a lot of environmental challenges, such as air pollution, resulting from the use of cars and vehicles. While certain group of individuals are of the opinion that by hiking the cost of petrol could mitigate this environmental pollution, I completely disagree with these school of thoughts. In my opinion, these issues could be alleviated by the construction of railways and introduction of electronic Trains. Increasing number of cars and vehicles plying the major road, had been noted to cause air pollution. This result from the combustion of fossil fuel which contaminate the atmosphere causing environmental issues. Some people opined that, if the prince of fuel used by cars and vehicle is increased, it will reduce the number of motorable machine. Thus, solving the environmental menace. For instance, in Japan, when the pump price of fuel was increased in 2016, there was a remarkable reduction in the number of cars on the metropolitan area, and also a decreased in gas emission. Hence, by increasing the cost of petroleum, the issues of polluting the environment were solved. Furthermore, environmental problem could also be alleviated by the construction of railways and provision of electronic trains. This will ultimately reduce the usage and dependent on cars and vehicle for transportation. People could travel by this means. To illustrate, recently, it was published on the national Newspaper, that since people started to patronise the ultra modern train station conveying passages from Abuja to Kaduna, there has been a reduction in the use of vehicles from the destination, as people now enjoy travelling by train. This has lead to curtail the emissions from using cars and vehicles plying the road and has therefore, reduced emission from them. In conclusion, although environmental challenges arising from the use of cars and vehicles could be solved by increasing the cost of petroleum used by these automobiles, there are others ways like, building train station and use of train as a means of transportation, will help mitigate these issues.
Recently, mankind has
been faced
with
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a lot of
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environmental
challenges, such as air pollution, resulting from the
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use
of
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cars
and
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vehicles
. While certain group of individuals are of the opinion that by hiking the cost of petrol could mitigate this
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environmental
pollution, I completely disagree with these school of thoughts. In my opinion, these
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issues
could
be alleviated
by the construction of railways and introduction of electronic Trains.

Increasing number of
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cars
and
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vehicles
plying the major road, had
been noted
to cause air pollution. This result from the combustion of fossil fuel which contaminate the atmosphere causing
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environmental
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issues
.
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Some
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people
opined that, if the prince of fuel
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used
by
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cars
and
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vehicle
is increased
, it will
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reduce
the number of
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motorable
machine.
Thus
, solving the
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environmental
menace.
For instance
, in Japan, when the pump price of fuel
was increased
in 2016, there was a remarkable reduction in the number of
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cars
on the metropolitan area, and
also
a decreased in gas emission.
Hence
, by increasing the cost of petroleum, the
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issues
of polluting the environment
were solved
.

Furthermore
,
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environmental
problem could
also
be alleviated
by the construction of railways and provision of electronic
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trains
. This will
ultimately
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reduce
the usage and dependent on
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cars
and
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vehicle
for transportation.
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People
could travel by this means. To illustrate, recently, it
was published
on the national Newspaper, that since
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people
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started
to
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patronise
the ultra modern
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train
station conveying passages from Abuja to
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Kaduna
, there has been a reduction in the
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use
of
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vehicles
from the destination, as
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people
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now
enjoy travelling by
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train
. This has lead to curtail the emissions from using
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cars
and
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vehicles
plying the road and has
therefore
,
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reduced
emission from them.

In conclusion
, although
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environmental
challenges arising from the
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use
of
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cars
and
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vehicles
could
be solved
by increasing the cost of petroleum
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used
by these automobiles, there are others ways like, building
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train
station and
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use
of
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train
as a means of transportation, will
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help
mitigate these
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issues
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that environmental problems can be solved by increasing the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
335 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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