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Some people think the best way to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent, do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people think the best way to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. v. 1
It is commonly believed by many that inflating the cost of fuel is the most efficient way to solve environmental issues. I partially agree with them because I believe that although it is an important way but there are many other more effective ways of doing so. On one hand, increase in the rate of fuel would definitely reduce the level of pollution to some extent. As increased rate will discourage people to use their vehicles unnecessarily, as it is a common trend to drive a car even though the distance is walkable. This will encourage people to use pooling of vehicle while going to same site. For instance, if five people from one community work in same office or location, it is the efficient to go by one car alternatively. This will also motivate them to use bicycles and public transport system. Thus, this will solve the problem to some extent. On the other hand, I believe this is not the key method and there are many other effective ways to solve environmental issues such as growing more trees and avoid use of plastic bags. Plastic containers should be replaced by bio-degradable glass dishes. Also I believe that this change would provide some level of discomfort to the public as the public transport system in most of the countries are not very convenient. In short, only increasing the rate of fuel would not protect the environment, people have to become conscious about the surrounding and put their contribution by many other ways such as aforementioned. In conclusion, I agree that inflated rates of fuel would decrease the environmental problems but it is not the most efficient way, as it will benefit the environment but may provide inconvenience to public. Only increasing the rate of fuel would not improve the adverse condition of our environment, many other measures need to be taken such as planting trees, choosing glass over plastic and using renewable resources instead of fossil fuels.
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believed by
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that inflating the cost of
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fuel
is the most efficient
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to solve environmental issues. I
partially
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agree
with them
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because
I believe that although it is an
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important
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way
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but
there are
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many
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other
more effective
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ways
of doing
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so
.

On one hand, increase in the
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rate
of
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fuel
would definitely
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reduce
the level of pollution to
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some
extent. As increased
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rate
will discourage
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people
to
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use
their vehicles
unnecessarily
, as it is a common trend to drive a car
even though
the distance is walkable. This will encourage
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people
to
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use
pooling of vehicle while going to same site.
For instance
, if five
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people
from one community work in same office or location, it is the efficient to go by one car
alternatively
. This will
also
motivate them to
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use
bicycles and
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public
transport system.
Thus
, this will solve the problem to
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some
extent.

On the
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other
hand, I believe this is not the key method and there are
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many
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other
effective
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ways
to solve environmental issues such as growing more trees and avoid
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use
of plastic bags. Plastic containers should
be replaced
by bio-degradable glass dishes.
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Also
I believe that this
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change
would provide
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some
level of discomfort to the
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public
as the
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public
transport system in most of the countries are not
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very
convenient. In short,
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only
increasing the
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rate
of
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fuel
would not protect the environment,
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people
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have to
become conscious about the surrounding and put their contribution by
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many
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other
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ways
such as aforementioned.

In conclusion
, I
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agree
that inflated
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rates
of
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fuel
would decrease the environmental problems
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but
it is not the most efficient
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way
, as it will benefit the environment
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but
may provide inconvenience to
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public
.
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Only
increasing the
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rate
of
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fuel
would not
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improve
the adverse condition of our environment,
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many
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other
measures need to
be taken
such as planting trees, choosing glass over plastic and using renewable resources
instead
of fossil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuels
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think the best way to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
328 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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