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Some people believe that educational success depends on good teachers. Others think that it is dependent on the attitude of the students. Discuss both of the views and give your opinion. v.5

Some people believe that educational success depends on good teachers. Others think that it is dependent on the attitude of the students. v. 5
Opinions are divided as to which element is more important to achieving academic success. While some say good instructors play a crucial role, I would argue that the right minds of students are more important. Admittedly, excellent instructors recognize students’ weaknesses and provide specific instructions, thus helping learners achieve academic success. Good instructors are often experienced and possess expertise, which means that they have a better chance of telling people what should be done to improve their academic scores. In other words, these instructors could assist learners in finding their flaws that might be overlooked or ignored by themselves, and then design courses that are tailored to students’ need, helping students form a better understanding of how to improve their academic performance. Following these instructions step by step, students are more likely to reach their academic goals than study at their own pace. In spite of the above argument, I believe that students’ attitudes are more important when it comes to academic achievements. Firstly, students may disagree with teachers’ judgement and evaluations, and then disobey rules or behave aggressively in the classroom on purpose, which may bring chaos and ruin the study atmosphere. In addition, when pupils have resistance to certain subjects due to laziness or dislike, teachers’ knowledge may not be appreciated. For example, if students hate studying math, a knowledgeable math professor can be completely ignored. That is to say, teachers’ efforts are valueless unless students enjoy the process of learning. In conclusion, teachers can guide students to get academic attainments, but such a guidance would be useless unless students have a positive opinion toward it.
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are divided
as to which element is more
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academic
success. While
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some
say
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good
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instructors
play a crucial role, I would argue that the right minds of
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students
are more
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important
.

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, excellent
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instructors
recognize
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students’
weaknesses and provide specific instructions,
thus
helping learners achieve
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academic
success.
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Good
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instructors
are
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often
experienced and possess expertise, which means that they have a better chance of telling
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people
what should
be done
to
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improve
their
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academic
scores.
In other words
, these
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instructors
could assist learners in finding their flaws that might
be overlooked
or
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ignored
by themselves, and then design courses that
are tailored
to
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students’
need, helping
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students
form a better understanding of how to
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improve
their
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academic
performance. Following these
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instructions
step by step,
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students
are more likely to reach their
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academic
goals than study at their
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own
pace.

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the above argument, I believe that
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students’
attitudes are more
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important
when it
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comes
to
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academic
achievements.
Firstly
,
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students
may disagree with
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teachers’
judgement and evaluations, and then disobey
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rules
or behave
aggressively
in the classroom on purpose, which may bring chaos and ruin the study atmosphere.
In addition
, when pupils have resistance to certain subjects due to laziness or dislike,
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teachers’
knowledge may not
be appreciated
.
For example
, if
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students
hate studying math, a knowledgeable math professor can be completely
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ignored
.
That is
to say,
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teachers’
efforts are valueless unless
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students
enjoy the process of learning.

In conclusion
,
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teachers
can guide
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students
to
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get
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academic
attainments,
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but
such a guidance would be useless unless
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students
have a
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positive
opinion toward it.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that educational success depends on good teachers. Others think that it is dependent on the attitude of the students. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
8
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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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