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Some people believe that developments in the field of artificial intelligence will have a positive impact on our lives in the near future. Others, by contrast, are worried that we are not prepared for a world in which computers are more intelligent than humans. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion. v.4

Some people believe that developments in the field of artificial intelligence will have a positive impact on our lives in the near future. Others, by contrast, are worried that we are not prepared for a world in which computers are more intelligent than humans. v. 4
It is argued that advances in artificial intelligence (AI) will bring a range of benefits in the foreseeable future. Others, however, fear that we are not equipped with the skills and experience needed to deal with computers or other technological devices that are becoming smarter than us. I personally agree with the first group. On the one hand, the main reason why some people think that AI might become a threat to human survival is that intelligent machines may become so smart that they could take control of humans one day in the future. Robots and machines might be able to make their own decisions without being given the permission of humans. Without the necessary knowledge, skills and experience, we might become their slaves. This could also lead to a war between humans and intelligent machines, posing a serious threat to the entire world. On the other hand, I would agree with those who think that developments in the field of AI will have beneficial effects on our lives in the not so distant future. For example, thanks to breakthroughs in satellite and spacecraft technologies, scientists will be able to make more precise predictions about extreme events, such as asteroid collisions or violent storms, which might threaten life on earth. Another example is that advances in automobile technology would help curb traffic congestion and improve road safety. Driverless cars and surveillance cameras would greatly contribute to minimising traffic accidents and traffic offences. In conclusion, although some people are worried about the threats that AI will cause to the world, I personally believe that developments in this technology will bring huge benefits to our lives.
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is argued
that advances in artificial intelligence
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will bring a range of benefits in the foreseeable future. Others,
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skills
and experience needed to deal with computers or other technological devices that are becoming smarter than us. I
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some
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people
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think
that AI
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might
become a threat to
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human
survival is that intelligent machines may become
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so
smart that they could take control of
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humans
one day in the future. Robots and machines
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might
be able to
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make
their
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own
decisions without being
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given
the permission of
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humans
. Without the necessary knowledge,
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skills
and experience, we
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might
become their slaves. This could
also
lead to a war between
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humans
and intelligent machines, posing a serious threat to the entire world.

On the other hand
, I would
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agree
with those who
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think
that developments in the field of AI will have beneficial effects on our
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lives
in the not
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so
distant future.
For example
, thanks to breakthroughs in satellite and spacecraft technologies, scientists will be able to
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make
more precise predictions about extreme
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events
, such as asteroid collisions or violent storms, which
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might
threaten life on earth. Another example is that advances in automobile technology would
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help
curb traffic congestion and
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improve
road safety. Driverless cars and surveillance cameras would
greatly
contribute to
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minimising
traffic accidents and traffic
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offences
.

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, although
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some
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people
are worried
about the threats that AI will cause to the world, I
personally
believe that developments in this technology will bring huge benefits to our
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lives
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IELTS essay Some people believe that developments in the field of artificial intelligence will have a positive impact on our lives in the near future. Others, by contrast, are worried that we are not prepared for a world in which computers are more intelligent than humans. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
6.5
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