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Some people believe that developments in the field of artificial intelligence will have a positive impact on our lives in the near future. Others, by contrast, are worried that we are not prepared for a world in which computers are more intelligent than humans. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion. v.3

Some people believe that developments in the field of artificial intelligence will have a positive impact on our lives in the near future. Others, by contrast, are worried that we are not prepared for a world in which computers are more intelligent than humans. v. 3
People seem to be either excited or worried about the future impact of artificial intelligence. Personally I can understand the two opposing points of view; I am both fascinated by developments in artificial intelligence and apprehensive about its possible negative effects. On the one hand, the increasing intelligence of technology should bring some obvious benefits. Machines are clearly able to do many jobs better than humans can, especially in areas that require high levels of accuracy or calculations using large amounts of data. For example, robots are being developed that can carry out surgical procedures with greater precision than a human doctor, and we already have cars that use sensors and cameras to drive themselves. Such technologies can improve safety by reducing the likelihood of human errors. It is easy to imagine how these developments, and many others, will steadily improve our quality of life. On the other hand, I share the concerns of people who believe that artificial intelligence may harm us if we are not careful. In the short term, it is likely that we will see a rise in unemployment as workers in various industries are replaced by machines or software programs. For example, self-driving vehicles are expected to cause redundancies in driving jobs, such as lorry drivers, taxi drivers and bus drivers. In the medium term, if intelligent technologies gradually take jobs away from humans, we may find that people become deskilled and lose their sense of purpose in life. A longer term fear is that computers become so intelligent that they begin to make decisions without human oversight and without regard for our well-being. In conclusion, while intelligent machines will no doubt improve our lives in many ways, the potential risks of such technologies should not be ignored.
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intelligence
.
Personally
I can understand the two opposing points of view; I am both fascinated by developments in artificial
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intelligence
and apprehensive about its possible
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negative
effects.

On the one hand, the increasing
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intelligence
of
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technology
should bring
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some
obvious benefits. Machines are
clearly
able to do
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many
jobs better than
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humans
can,
especially
in areas that require high levels of accuracy or calculations using large amounts of data.
For example
, robots are
being developed
that can carry out surgical procedures with greater precision than a
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human
doctor, and we already have cars that
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use
sensors and cameras to drive themselves. Such
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technologies
can
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improve
safety by reducing the likelihood of
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human
errors. It is easy to imagine how these developments, and
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many
others, will
steadily
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improve
our quality of life.

On the other hand
, I share the concerns of
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people
who believe that artificial
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intelligence
may harm us if we are not careful. In the short term, it is likely that we will
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see
a rise in unemployment as workers in various industries
are replaced
by machines or software programs.
For example
, self-driving vehicles are
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expected
to cause redundancies in driving jobs, such as lorry drivers, taxi drivers and bus drivers. In the medium term, if intelligent
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technologies
gradually
take jobs away from
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humans
, we may find that
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people
become deskilled and lose their sense of purpose in life. A longer term fear is that computers become
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so
intelligent that they
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begin
to
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make
decisions without
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human
oversight and without regard for our well-being.

In conclusion
, while intelligent machines will no doubt
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improve
our
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lives
in
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many
ways, the potential
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risks
of such
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technologies
should not be
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ignored
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13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that developments in the field of artificial intelligence will have a positive impact on our lives in the near future. Others, by contrast, are worried that we are not prepared for a world in which computers are more intelligent than humans. v. 3

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