The proper use of money while buying different things is called money management. It is true that the wise use of money always help children to fulfil their needs and wishes. Therefore, I strongly agreed that children should be trained in schools on how to spend money carefully. (48)
We had seen in the past that people had limited resources and lack of education. However, they always take great care of their children. They fulfil all the wishes and needs of their children, but always advised them to use the money wisely. (42)
Presently, the phenomenon of money management is spreading greatly among children all over the world. Nowadays, all the popular institutions are arranging lectures for children on how to manage money. There are several reasons behind this great initiative. First of all, in schools, children always considered teachers as their role models. So when a teacher asks them to manage money, the students must follow his instructions. Secondly, schools always offered a learning environment for children in a disciplined way. So lessons on money management are really beneficial for children if arranged as a part of extracurricular activities. (97)
The recent attention of educational institutions towards overall grooming of children has greatly inspired the children as well as their parents. Thus, if the schools keep on training children to manage money, then our new generation will surely be able to fulfil all their wishes and needs from their own pocket money. (52)
Hence, I believed that it is the moral duty of all schools to arrange lectures on money management so that children must realize the importance of money and always spend it carefully. (32)
The proper
use
of
money
while buying
different
things
is called
money
management
. It is true that the wise
use
of
money
always
help
children
to fulfil their needs and wishes.
Therefore
, I
strongly
agreed
that
children
should
be trained
in
schools
on how to spend
money
carefully
. (48)
We had
seen
in the past that
people
had limited resources and lack of education.
However
, they always take great care of their
children
. They fulfil all the wishes and needs of their
children
,
but
always advised them to
use
the
money
wisely
. (42)
Presently
, the phenomenon of
money
management
is spreading
greatly
among
children
all over the world. Nowadays, all the popular institutions are arranging lectures for
children
on how to manage
money
. There are several reasons behind this great initiative.
First of all
, in
schools
,
children
always considered teachers as their role models.
So
when a teacher asks them to manage
money
, the students
must
follow his instructions.
Secondly
,
schools
always offered a learning environment for
children
in a disciplined way.
So
lessons on
money
management
are
really
beneficial for
children
if arranged as a part of extracurricular activities. (97)
The recent attention of educational institutions towards
overall
grooming of
children
has
greatly
inspired the
children
as well
as their parents.
Thus
, if the
schools
keep
on training
children
to manage
money
, then our new generation will
surely
be able to fulfil all their wishes and needs from their
own
pocket
money
. (52)
Hence
, I believed that it is the moral duty of all
schools
to arrange lectures on
money
management
so
that
children
must
realize the importance of
money
and always spend it
carefully
. (32)
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes