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Some people believe that children at secondary school should be streamed, i. e. taught in classes according to ability, rather than being taught in mixed-ability classes. Do you think the advantages of streaming children at secondary school outweigh the disadvantages? v.1

Some people believe that children at secondary school should be streamed, i. e. taught in classes according to ability, rather than being taught in mixed-ability classes. Do you think the advantages of streaming children at secondary school outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1
Grouping children at secondary level according to ability is favoured by some people over classes with different ability levels. While there may be some advantages to this approach, I personally think that the drawbacks of streaming outweigh the benefits. The main benefit of streaming is that pupils of all abilities will benefit through being taught at a pace that suits their level. If, for example, pupils are struggling with a chemistry lesson, the teacher can go at a slower pace and vice versa for higher-level pupils. Some people also argue that mixed-ability classes disadvantage students at both extremes of ability, as it is easier to teach a class who are all of the same ability level. From the teacher’s point of view, everything is aimed at the pupils in the middle-ability range. Having said that however, I feel that streaming children at secondary level is harmful. The main drawback is that if children are not taught in mixed-ability classes, it does not prepare them for the real world they will encounter in the future. This could then hold them back and reduce their career opportunities considerably. Streaming can also disadvantage children, because it is possible that children will be labelled wrongly and their potential not realized. Unless there is some competition in the classroom as in mixed-ability classrooms, the children will not be stretched. This can then have a negative impact on children’s attitude to learning and to school in general, resulting in a decline in pupils’ attainment. As we have seen, there are both advantages and disadvantages involved in streaming pupils at secondary level, but, in my opinion, the latter outweigh the former.
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ability
is
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classes
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ability
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. While there may be
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some
advantages to this approach, I
personally
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think
that the drawbacks of
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outweigh the benefits.

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streaming
is that
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pupils
of all
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abilities
will benefit through
being taught
at a pace that suits their
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level
. If,
for example
,
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pupils
are struggling with a chemistry lesson, the teacher can go at a slower pace and vice versa for higher-level
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pupils
.
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people
also
argue that mixed-ability
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classes
disadvantage students at both extremes of
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ability
, as it is easier to teach a
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class
who are
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same
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ability
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level
. From the teacher’s point of view, everything
is aimed
at the
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pupils
in the middle-ability range.

Having said that
however
, I feel that
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streaming
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children
at secondary
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level
is harmful. The main drawback is that if
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children
are not taught in mixed-ability
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classes
, it does not prepare them for the real world they will encounter in the future. This could then hold them back and
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reduce
their career opportunities
considerably
.

Streaming can
also
disadvantage
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children
,
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because
it is possible that
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children
will
be labelled
wrongly
and their potential not realized. Unless there is
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some
competition in the classroom as in mixed-ability classrooms, the
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children
will not
be stretched
. This can then have a
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negative
impact on
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children’s
attitude to learning and to school
in general
, resulting in a decline in
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pupils’
attainment.

As we have
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seen
, there are both advantages and disadvantages involved in
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streaming
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pupils
at secondary
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level
,
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but
, in my opinion, the latter outweigh the former.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that children at secondary school should be streamed, i. e. taught in classes according to ability, rather than being taught in mixed-ability classes. Do you think the advantages of streaming children at secondary school outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1

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