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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree v.19

In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. v. 19
It is argued that governments should levy a tariff on junk feed because the number of health risks associated with consuming this kind of foodstuff is on the rise. This essay agrees that a higher rate of tax should be paid by fast feed companies. Firstly, this essay will discuss the fact that alcohol and tobacco companies already pay higher taxes and secondly, discuss how higher taxes would raise prices and lower consumption. Higher excise on liquor and cigarettes has proven to be successful at curbing the harm caused by these substances. This revenue has been used to treat health problems associated with these products and has proven useful in advertising campaigns warning people about the dangers of alcohol and tobacco abuse. Tax from fast foodstuff could be used in the same way. The United Kingdom is a prime example, where money from smokers is used to treat lung cancer and heart disease. Increasing taxes would raise prices and lower consumption. Fast cuisine companies would pass on these taxes to consumers in the form of higher prices and this would lead to people not being able to afford junk foodstuff because it is too expensive. Junk meat would soon become a luxury item and it would only be consumed occasionally, which would be less harmful to the general public’s health. For instance, the cost of organic meal has proven prohibitively expensive for most people and that is why only a small percentage of the population buys it regularly. In conclusion, junk meat should be taxed at a higher rate because of the good precedent set by alcohol and tobacco and the fact that the increased cost should reduce the amount of fast feed people buy.
It
is argued
that
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governments
should levy a tariff on
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junk
feed
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because
the number of health
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risks
associated with consuming this kind of foodstuff is on the rise. This essay
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agrees
that a higher rate of
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tax
should
be paid
by
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fast
feed
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companies
.
Firstly
, this essay will discuss the fact that alcohol and tobacco
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companies
already pay higher
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taxes
and
secondly
, discuss how higher
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taxes
would raise prices and lower consumption.

Higher excise on liquor and cigarettes has proven to be successful at curbing the harm caused by these substances. This revenue has been
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used
to treat health problems associated with these products and has proven useful in advertising campaigns warning
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people
about the
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dangers
of alcohol and tobacco abuse.
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Tax
from
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fast
foodstuff could be
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used
in the same way
. The United Kingdom is a prime example, where money from smokers is
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used
to treat lung cancer and heart disease.

Increasing
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taxes
would raise prices and lower consumption.
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Fast
cuisine
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companies
would pass on these
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taxes
to consumers in the form of higher prices and this would lead to
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people
not being able to afford
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junk
foodstuff
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because
it is too expensive.
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Junk
meat would
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soon
become a luxury item and it would
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only
be consumed
occasionally
, which would be less harmful to the
Consider using "public".
general public
’s health.
For instance
, the cost of organic meal has proven
prohibitively
expensive for most
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people
and
that is
why
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only
a
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small
percentage of the population
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buys
it
regularly
.

In conclusion
,
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junk
meat should
be taxed
at a higher rate
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because
of the
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good
precedent set by alcohol and tobacco and the fact that the increased cost should
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reduce
the amount of
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fast
feed
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people
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buy
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. v. 19

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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