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More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone? v.5

More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone? v. 5
It is an indisputable fact that among the population the opportunities in cities are much appreciated. Consequently, more people have migrated to them than ever before. Nevertheless, citizens habitually are also unaware about foreseeable issues of this life-changing decisions. This essay will examine possible problems of living in urban areas and appropriate solutions to solve them. Firstly, among the globe a majority of high-populated cities faces a significant problem of traffic jams. The vivid example of this is Moscow, although drivers in the capital have been using special applications like Yandex Traffic to avoid them and save their time for 10 years already, the Moscow Trafic department has approved that the situation is worse than ever before. Moreover, this problem leads to constant background noise, which adversely affects comfort of urban life. Therefore, traffic jams and loud sounds, which is caused because of them, are the main problems of living in towns. Nevertheless, a government can improve living in cities by organizing special highways with noise consumption filters. For instance, Russian Rent Organizations increased the position of Saint Petersburg in the list of the most comfortable towns in the country when authorities of the city had created a new circular highway around the city with specially calculated filters for sound suppression. It is hard to argue that such measures can reduce the amountg of cars inside the urban areas and improve the quality of living. Thus, creation of special routs for high-speed trips with the filters is a suitable way for improving life of citizens. To conclude, despite the popular trend of migrating to cities, a life in the new environment has some drawbacks. The most popular among them are traffic jams and loud background noise. However, authorities can easily solve this issues by creating highways with noise consumption walls. It is hoped that in the future all governments around the globe will implement this measures.
It is an indisputable fact that among the population the opportunities in
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cities
are much appreciated.
Consequently
, more
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people
have migrated to them than ever
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before
.
Nevertheless
, citizens
habitually
are
also
unaware about foreseeable issues of this life-changing decisions. This essay will examine possible
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problems
of
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living
in urban areas and appropriate solutions to solve them.

Firstly
, among the globe a majority of high-populated
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cities
faces a significant
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problem
of
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traffic
jams. The vivid example of this is Moscow, although drivers in the capital have been using special applications like Yandex
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Traffic
to avoid them and save their time for 10 years already, the Moscow
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Trafic
department has approved that the situation is worse than ever
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before
.
Moreover
, this
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problem
leads to constant background
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noise
, which
adversely
affects comfort of urban life.
Therefore
,
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traffic
jams and loud sounds, which
is caused
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because
of them, are the main
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problems
of
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living
in towns.

Nevertheless
, a
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government
can
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improve
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living
in
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cities
by organizing special highways with
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noise
consumption filters.
For instance
, Russian Rent Organizations increased the position of Saint Petersburg in the list of the most comfortable towns in the country when authorities of the city had created a new circular highway around the city with
specially
calculated filters for sound suppression. It is
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hard
to argue that such measures can
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reduce
the
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amountg
of cars inside the urban areas and
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improve
the quality of
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living
.
Thus
, creation of special routs for high-speed trips with the filters is a suitable way for improving life of citizens.

To conclude
, despite the popular trend of migrating to
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cities
, a life in the new environment has
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some
drawbacks. The most popular among them are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
jams and loud background
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
noise
.
However
, authorities can
easily
solve this issues by creating highways with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
noise
consumption walls. It
is hoped
that in the future all
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
around the globe will implement this measures.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
316 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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