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• Some people believe that all the company decisions should be taken by the managers whereas others think it is better to include employees while making decisions. Discuss both the points and give your opinion. v.1

• Some people believe that all the company decisions should be taken by the managers whereas others think it is better to include employees while making decisions. v. 1
It is the most debatable question of decision making in the organization. Some are in favour of managers while few opine that employees should also be a part of decision taking. Hereby, we will discuss both views on the decisiveness below. On one hand, decisions of organization adjudge by directors, it's the aid to the company's growth. Firstly, An employer has the expertise to decide a suitable formula to resolve an issue without anyone's help because that's individualism. Secondly, the addition of further opinions in deciding a method make the problem harder than before because when a bunch of perspectives assemble, the situation is uncontrollable & unmanageable. Hence, manage the consequences by a controller that's the better way to deal with this competitive world. On the other hand, involving the staff members in decision making helps to understand the method, Due to, more views of colleagues will make a way to reach a favourable stop. With the help of them, directors think in a wider way of deciding a conclusion. In addition, they have the solution of a particular department in a finer method. Because of them, directors know the inaccuracy in proper procedure. People in the team know the error of the task help them to gain knowledge about the project. They will have new ideas to complete the task on time without any blunder. To summarize, although it is believed by some that the company's settlement of problems should be decided by the employer for development of the organization. In my view, including the members in the decision making process will help to boost the company's success, and it will help the colleagues that they should trust their managers and they believe that company needs them.
It is the most debatable question of
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decision making
in the organization.
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Some
are in
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favour
of managers while few opine that employees should
also
be a part of
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decision
taking. Hereby, we will discuss both views on the decisiveness below.

On one hand,
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decisions
of organization adjudge by directors, it's the aid to the
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company
's growth.
Firstly
, An employer has the expertise to decide a suitable formula to resolve an issue without anyone's
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help
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because
that's individualism.
Secondly
, the addition of
further
opinions in deciding a method
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make
the problem harder than
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before
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because
when a bunch of perspectives
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assemble
, the situation is uncontrollable & unmanageable.
Hence
, manage the
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consequences by
a controller that's the better way to deal with this competitive world.

On the other hand
, involving the staff members in
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decision making
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helps
to understand the method, Due to, more views of colleagues will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a way to reach a
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favourable
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stop
. With the
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help
of them, directors
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think
in a wider way of deciding a conclusion.
In addition
, they have the solution of a particular department in a finer method.
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Because
of them, directors know the inaccuracy in proper procedure.
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People
in the team know the error of the task
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help
them to gain knowledge about the project. They will have new
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ideas
to complete the task on time without any blunder.

To summarize
, although it
is believed
by
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some
that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
's settlement of problems should
be decided
by the employer for development of the organization. In my view, including the members in the
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
decision making
process will
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help
to boost the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
's success, and it will
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help
the colleagues that they should trust their
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
managers and
they believe that
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company
needs them.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay • Some people believe that all the company decisions should be taken by the managers whereas others think it is better to include employees while making decisions. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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