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Some people believe that all children should learn a foreign language from the time they start school, while others believe it is better to wait until a child is at secondary school. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion. v.2

Some people believe that all children should learn a foreign language from the time they start school, while others believe it is better to wait until a child is at secondary school. v. 2
Some experts think that the best time for young people to learn a new language is at primary school. While this could bring many benefits and drawbacks. I believe that the advantages are far more than the disadvantages. Learning a foreign language at primary could have some possible disadvantages. Firstly, it could be a waste of time since children need to focus on other subjects such as math, science, and their own mother tongue language, which they might need it more than the foreign one. Secondly, children may get confused because of learning many languages at the same time and this could have a negative impact on their development. For example, it is claimed that bilingual children develop the ability to talk more slowly than monolingual kids. On the other hand, I think that children learn faster at a young age because they are less self-conscious and shy. So they can easily pick up the right pronunciation and try to copy it. Furthermore, children enjoy practising languages through games. Thus, learning and copying others could be a fun in itself for them. In other words, for children learning languages is not a hard task as it is for adults. In addition, languages nowadays are as important as science and math. Acquiring an international language like English could be very important for young people to get better job opportunities in the future. In conclusion, it seems to me that the benefits of teaching children foreign languages as soon as possible outweigh the drawbacks.
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at the same time and this could have a
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impact on their development.
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that bilingual
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children
develop the ability to talk more
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than monolingual kids.

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task as it is for adults.
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nowadays are as
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language
like English could be
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very
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for young
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to
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better job opportunities in the future.

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, it seems to me that the benefits of teaching
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children
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as
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as possible outweigh the drawbacks.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that all children should learn a foreign language from the time they start school, while others believe it is better to wait until a child is at secondary school. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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