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Some people believe that advertising has a strong effect on a person’s decision-making process. Others feel that it has little or no real impact. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion v.2

Some people believe that advertising has a strong effect on a person’s decision-making process. Others feel that it has little or no real impact. 2
Nowadays, most companies use an advertisement as a source of medium for promoting their products. While certain individuals opine that advertising has had a huge impact on one’s decision whether to buy that product or not, others belong to the school of thought that it has less or no impact. This essay will discuss both views to ascertain the best approach. On the one hand, it is reasoned that advertisement has strongly affected on human’s mind because it seems ubiquitous nowadays. In other words, many companies pay a huge amount for frequently showing ads on the television during break time, internet by showing pop-up advert, roads in the form of billboards and newspaper. Take Apple Company as an example, who promotes their iPhone latest models on a huge scale by ads on television and the internet, so that it reaches every part of the world and their customers’ buy it. Therefore, some strongly feel that seeing regular advertising makes a huge effect on purchasing the product. On the other hand, others believe that it has less or no impact while making a decision because of waiting for positive reviews. Most customers think that let other customers buy and use them. If the review is positive, they will look into the features and advertisement for purchase. Moreover, many believe that some companies just show a fake advertisement to attract their customer, even though their product is not successful in the market. For example, many cars companies show a fake advertisement to attract their customer by giving 5 years free servicing. To sum up, although some feel that advertising creates a huge impact on the decision of people by showing them regularly using television and internet as a medium, other strongly hold that it has no impact as wait for positive feedback from other buyers. In my opinion, most companies are succeeded reaching their customer's mind to enable them to buy their products by spending a huge amount on advertisements.
Nowadays, most
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advertisement
as a source of medium for promoting their
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products
. While certain individuals opine that advertising has had a
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huge
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impact
on one’s decision whether to
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buy
that
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product
or not, others belong to the school of
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thought
that it has less or no
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impact
. This essay will discuss both views to ascertain the best approach.

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is reasoned
that
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advertisement
has
strongly
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affected
on human’s mind
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because
it seems ubiquitous nowadays. In
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other
words,
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many
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companies
pay a
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huge
amount for
frequently
showing ads on the television during break time, internet by showing pop-up advert, roads in the form of billboards and newspaper. Take Apple
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Company
as an example, who promotes their iPhone latest models on a
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huge
scale by ads on television and the internet,
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so
that it reaches every part of the world and their
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customers’
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buy
it.
Therefore
,
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some
strongly
feel that seeing regular advertising
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makes
a
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huge
effect on purchasing the product.

On the
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other
hand, others believe that it has less or no
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impact
while making a decision
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because
of waiting for
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positive
reviews. Most
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customers
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think
that
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let
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other
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customers
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buy
and
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use
them. If the review is
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positive
, they will look into the features and
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advertisement
for
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purchase
.
Moreover
,
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many
believe that
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some
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companies
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just
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show
a fake
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advertisement
to attract their
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customer
,
even though
their
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product
is not successful in the market.
For example
,
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many
cars
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companies
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show
a fake
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advertisement
to attract their
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customer
by giving 5 years free servicing.

To sum up, although
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some
feel that advertising creates a
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huge
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impact
on the decision of
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people
by showing them
regularly
using television and internet as a medium,
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other
strongly
hold that it has no
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impact
as wait for
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positive
feedback from
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other
buyers. In my opinion, most
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companies
are succeeded
reaching their customer's mind to enable them to
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buy
their
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products
by spending a
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huge
amount on
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advertisements
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that advertising has a strong effect on a person’s decision-making process. Others feel that it has little or no real impact. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
328 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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