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Some people believe that a crime is a result of social problems and poverty, others think that crime is a result of bad person's nature. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.4

Some people believe that a crime is a result of social problems and poverty, others think that crime is a result of bad person's nature. v. 4
One of the global problem is crime and it is a consequence of social issues and misery, others believe that crime is perpetrated by a bad behaviour person. I am going to discuss these views according to scientific and humanistic. There are various reasons why many people find crime is a result of public trouble as well as poor people than bad behaviour one. Firstly, some persons earn too less money and they must feed their family. As we know that in the world has families and people, who cannot work anywhere or live alone and have not got bread-winner. As a result of earning too little money, they have to do crime like thief, robbery or other one. Secondly, in the present, there are many problems with society crime. Since, today more people work a lot a day and they feel nervous and tired themselves. In many cases, they cannot concert with someone and unfortunately, they are killed or trounced that person. Lastly, modern younger like to do devilment and they committed crimes such as burglary, arson, deal drugs or joyriding. It is result of pet. In my view, people must study and learn a new skill for their future. Because, more of misdeeds are committed by illiterate people. There are not any jobs also cannot work and earn money to feed. Committing crime is the best way for them in order to making money. To sum up, committing crime is increasing day by day. The reasons are badly behaviour people and poverty, social problems too. ☆ Dilafruz ☆
One of the global problem is
crime
and it is a consequence of social issues and misery, others believe that
crime
is perpetrated
by a
bad
behaviour
person. I am going to discuss these views according to scientific and humanistic.

There are various reasons why
many
people
find
crime
is a result of public trouble
as well
as poor
people
than
bad
behaviour
one.
Firstly
,
some
persons earn too less
money and
they
must
feed their family. As we know that in the world has families and
people
, who cannot work anywhere or
live
alone and have not
got
bread-winner.
As a result
of earning too
little
money, they
have to
do
crime
like thief, robbery or other one.
Secondly
, in the present, there are
many
problems with society
crime
. Since,
today
more
people
work a lot a
day and
they feel nervous and tired themselves. In
many
cases, they cannot concert with someone and unfortunately, they
are killed
or trounced that person.
Lastly
, modern younger like to do
devilment and
they committed
crimes
such as burglary, arson, deal drugs or joyriding. It is result of pet.

In my view,
people
must
study and learn a new
skill
for their future.
Because
, more of misdeeds
are committed
by illiterate
people
. There are not any jobs
also
cannot work and earn money to feed. Committing
crime
is the best way for them in order to
making
money.

To sum up, committing
crime
is increasing day by day. The reasons are
badly
behaviour
people
and poverty, social problems too.

Dilafruz
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that a crime is a result of social problems and poverty, others think that crime is a result of bad person's nature. v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
259 words
6.5
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