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The main purpose of public libraries should be to provide books. Public libraries should not spend their limited resources on computer software, videos or DVDs. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

The main purpose of public libraries should be to provide books. Public libraries should not spend their limited resources on computer software, videos or DVDs. v. 1
The pie charts illustrate information about how many units of electricity production by using five different fuel sources (coal, oil, natural gas, nuclear power and hydropower) in various areas ( australia and france ) in 1998 and 2000. Overall, the majority of electric power factors in australia was coal in both years and in france, nuclear power had been used the greatest productivity of electric in 2000. In addition, the amount of electric power made by coal in australia in 2000 was 50 units out of 100 units while production from hydropower and natural gas were similar and it was 20 units of out of 100 units. Furthermore, the least production of electricity by consuming oil was 10 units. However, the fuel factors structure of electric power production in australia was not completely equal to france. The vital of nuclear power in france was not used in australia. But, comparing two years of france it can be clearly seen nuclear power usage of creating electricity in 2000 was steadily increased rather than in 1998.
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IELTS essay The main purpose of public libraries should be to provide books. Public libraries should not spend their limited resources on computer software, videos or DVDs. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
174 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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