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some people believe parents are the best teacher and others not. which one do you agree? support with examples and reasons v.1

some people believe parents are the best teacher and others not. which one do you agree? support with examples and reasons v. 1
Our entire education system is based on what we accumulate each day of our life. So, there has been no shortage of debate about when and how the parents role important in their children’s education. However, the question is does the parents are good teachers? Some people believe parents never become good teachers; probably they don’t have prior knowledge about the subjects. On the other hand I personally feel parents consistently become good teachers for reasons I will explore in the following essay. To begin with, almost for sure our parents are the best teachers at the beginning of our lives, which actually corresponds to the parents role in nature. Parents are most committed and involved in teaching their children; they have a kind on instinct to sacrifices their life for their children betterment. My friend Alex mother is a best example to illustrates this. When we were studying 3rd grade he couldn’t attend school with his health issues. His mother sacrifices her job and stay with him at home. On the top of that, she tough all subjects to him very patiently, as a result, he got highest grade in class without attending classes. MY principal appreciated her at parents meeting; he said that the whole credit goes his mother. In addition to that, even though the parents are not specialized in education, their role in teaching their children to be aware of the need of improving their knowledge. In fact, our parents probably don’t know anything about math, science and chemistry but they are very much involved in giving a lessons about being a independent, self confidence, strong and confidence those are very important to success in carrier. MY personal life experience is a best example to illustrate this. When I was studying high school, at Omak public school I failed in two subjects and then I didn’t attend couple months to school with guilty. My parents are really supported me at that point, their words and suggestion make me to go to school again. They said never give up in life those words illuminate me to complete my graduation. Now I am working as a Health informatics specialist. In conclusion, although some people disagree with my Idea, I personally feel parents are always a best teachers because their lessons are last forever. Even my parents are old now, still I ask their suggestion whenever I need based on their life experience.
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is based
on what we accumulate each day of our
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role
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in their
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education.
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, the question is does the
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teachers
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never become
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;
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feel
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parents
consistently
become
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good
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teachers
for reasons I will explore in the following essay.

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begin
with, almost for sure our
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best
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at the beginning of our
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lives
, which actually corresponds to the
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parents
role in nature.
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Parents
are most committed and involved in teaching their
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children
; they have a kind on instinct to sacrifices their
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life
for their
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children
betterment. My friend Alex mother is
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a
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best
example to illustrates this.
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When
we were studying 3rd grade he couldn’t attend
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school
with his health issues. His mother sacrifices her job and stay with him at home. On the top of that, she tough all subjects to him
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very
patiently
,
as a result
, he
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highest
grade in
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without attending classes. MY principal appreciated her at
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parents
meeting; he said that the whole credit goes his mother.

In addition
to that,
even though
the
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parents
are not specialized in education, their role in teaching their
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children
to be aware of the need of improving their knowledge. In fact, our
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parents
probably
don’t know anything about math, science and chemistry
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they are
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very
much involved in giving
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independent,
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self confidence
, strong and confidence those are
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very
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important
to success in carrier. MY personal
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life
experience is
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a
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best
example to illustrate this. When I was studying high
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school
, at
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Omak
public
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school
I failed in two subjects and then I didn’t attend couple months to
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school
with guilty. My
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parents
are
really
supported me at that point, their words and suggestion
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make
me to go to
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school
again. They said never give up in
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life
those words illuminate me to complete my graduation.
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Now
I am working as a Health informatics specialist.

In conclusion
, although
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some
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disagree with my
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, I
personally
feel
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parents
are always
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best
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because
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parents
are
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now
,
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I ask their suggestion whenever I need based on their
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life
experience.
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IELTS essay some people believe parents are the best teacher and others not. which one do you agree? support with examples and reasons v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
404 words
5.5
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