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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: it's better to make friends with intelligent people than with people who have a sense of humor? v.2

: it's better to make friends with intelligent people than with people who have a sense of humor? v. 2
Friends are very important in our life. Good friends can inspire us to make progress constantly or release our pressure. When it comes to making friends, some people argue that it is better to have intelligent friends, while others believe that it is more advisable to make humorous friends. As for me, I agree with the former one. First, intelligent friends can give us practical and useful suggestions when we meet difficulties. Intelligent people can analyze the situation in a logical sequence and creative angle, which enables them to provide some unique opinions. For example, when I had an internship in a data analysis company, I was struggling to find the reason of revenue declination. However, it seemed that I could not make a good model. Then, I asked my smart and experienced leader, who gave me suggestions quickly, telling me to segregate the market in a more detailed way and analyzing each situation accordingly. She even told me some factors I could pay attention to. Following her instruction, I quickly found the right way and handed in the report on time. By making intelligent friends, we can often get the new perspective of thinking. They always point out the right and specific angle which helps us to solve the problem more efficiently. Second, smart friends can encourage us to enhance ourselves. Usually, smart people have better abilities and higher social status. Thus, inspiring by them, we are more likely to work hard to reach their height. For example, when I was in high school, I made friends with one of the best students in our class. She often ranked top 1% in our class and also participated in many social activities. As the leader of our school radio, she could organize the team orderly and efficiently. As her friend, I don’t want to leave behind her. I wanted to be as shine as her too. As a result, I often ask her to go to the library or helped her with her radio work. Then, when I stepped into the university, I joined in one of the best clubs in our school, accumulating many smart people. Since I didn’t want to shame the reputation of the club, I worked extremely hard to help me involve in the club and have the common topic with them. Since they all have high expectation and requirement of themselves, I gradually learned to become those people too. Admittedly, some people may argue that we can release our pressure by making humorous friends. In such a rapidly growing world, everyone is under lots of pressure, leading to physical and mental health problem. Making jokes with friends can help us unwind and maintain a good mindset. However, it can also be achieved by playing sports or watching TV. Friends are not just about entertainment, more importantly, friends can motivate each other and make progress together. Friends who just play and eat together cannot maintain a long-term friendship, however, by fighting together and witnessing other’s progress, people will consider the friendship as a treasure in their life and keep it forever. All in all, it is more important to make intelligent friends, who can help us when we are in difficulties and make improvement together.
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Friends
are
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very
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important
in our life.
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Good
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friends
can inspire us to
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make
progress
constantly
or release our pressure. When it
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comes
to making
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friends
,
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some
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people
argue that it is better to have
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intelligent
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friends
, while others believe that it is more advisable to
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make
humorous
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friends
. As for me, I
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agree
with the former one.

First
,
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intelligent
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friends
can give us practical and useful suggestions when we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
difficulties.
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Intelligent
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people
can analyze the situation in a logical sequence and creative angle, which enables them to provide
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
unique opinions.
For example
, when I had an internship in a data analysis
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
, I was struggling to find the reason of revenue declination.
However
, it seemed that I could not
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make
a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
model. Then, I asked my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
smart
and experienced leader, who gave me suggestions
quickly
, telling me to segregate the market in a more detailed way and analyzing each situation
accordingly
. She even
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
me
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
factors I could pay attention to. Following her instruction, I
quickly
found the right way and handed in the report on time. By making
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
intelligent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
, we can
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the new perspective of thinking. They always point out the right and specific angle which
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helps
us to solve the problem more
efficiently
.

Second,
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smart
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friends
can encourage us to enhance ourselves.
Usually
,
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smart
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
have better abilities and higher social status.
Thus
, inspiring by them, we are more likely to work
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
to reach their height.
For example
, when I was in high school, I made
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
with one of the best students in our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
. She
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
ranked top 1% in our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
and
also
participated in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
social activities. As the leader of our school radio, she could organize the team orderly and
efficiently
. As her
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friend
, I don’t want to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
behind her. I wanted to be as shine as her too.
As a result
, I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
ask her to go to the library or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
her with her radio work. Then, when I stepped into the university, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
joined
in one of the best clubs in our school, accumulating
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
smart
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
. Since I didn’t want to shame the reputation of the club, I worked
extremely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
me involve in the club and have the common topic with them. Since they all have high expectation and requirement of themselves, I
gradually
learned to become those
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people
too.

Admittedly
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
may argue that we can release our pressure by making humorous
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
. In such a
rapidly
growing world, everyone is under lots of pressure, leading to physical and mental health problem. Making jokes with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
us unwind and maintain a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
mindset.
However
, it can
also
be achieved
by playing sports or watching TV.
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Friends
are not
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just
about entertainment, more
importantly
,
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friends
can motivate each other and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
progress together.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Friends
who
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
play and eat together cannot maintain a long-term friendship,
however
, by fighting together and witnessing other’s progress,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
will consider the friendship as a treasure in their life and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
it forever.

All in all, it is more
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important
to
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make
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
intelligent
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friends
, who can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
us when we are in difficulties and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
improvement together.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay : it's better to make friends with intelligent people than with people who have a sense of humor? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
539 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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