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Some people believe online reading materials should only be used for a child to learn to read whereas others believe only printed material should be used Discuss both views and give your opinion v.23

Some people believe online reading materials should only be used for a child to learn to read whereas others believe only printed material should be used 23
People throughout the both developing and developed countries have debated whether the advent of sophisticated modern technology such as mobile phones, iPad and laptops have helped child to enhance and improve reading skills or whether reading from paper is the better option, especially for child. Personally, I advocate the later view. This essay will discuss both sides with examples to demonstrate points and prove arguments. On the one hand there is ample evidence that web based study can be detrimental especially for young generation who are more likely to get distracted by other online games and sites. With this they won’t be able to concentrate much on reading material, however sitting in front of computer screen for log duration may have several mental and physical side effects. For example, recent scientific research by India government demonstrated that up to 2 years of age kids shouldn’t be shown any of the gadgets as later on it may cause many health problems. On the other hand, reading through books and paper is cheap and affordable as low income parents need not to spend hard earned money on costly gadgets and hefty internet bills. Additionally, printed material is helpful in all those areas where electricity and internet
People
throughout the both developing and
developed countries
have debated whether the advent of sophisticated modern technology such as mobile phones, iPad and laptops have
helped
child to enhance and
improve
reading
skills
or whether
reading
from paper is the better option,
especially
for child.
Personally
, I advocate the later view. This essay will discuss both sides with examples to demonstrate points and prove arguments.

On the one hand there is ample evidence that web based study can be detrimental
especially
for young generation who are more likely to
get
distracted by other online games and sites. With this they won’t be able to concentrate much on
reading
material,
however
sitting in front of computer screen for log duration may have several mental and physical side effects.
For example
, recent scientific research by India
government
demonstrated that up to 2 years of age kids shouldn’t
be shown
any of the gadgets as later on it may cause
many
health problems.

On the other hand
,
reading
through books and paper is
cheap
and affordable as low income parents need not
to spend
hard earned
money on costly gadgets and hefty internet bills.
Additionally
, printed material is helpful in all those areas where electricity and internet
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe online reading materials should only be used for a child to learn to read whereas others believe only printed material should be used 23

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
203 words
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