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Some people believe online reading materials should only be used for a child to learn to read whereas others believe only printed material should be used. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.18

Some people believe online reading materials should only be used for a child to learn to read whereas others believe only printed material should be used. v. 18
These days, many people argue about the most effective method of teaching children how to read. While some advocate the use of digital materials, others still consider the traditional way of using books as the best. In my opinion, children should use both interchangeably to improve their literacy skills. Admittedly, reading materials on the internet is all the rage due to the advancements in technology. Unlike paper books or other printed reading materials, there are a variety of resources available online, such as electronic books and articles, which are mostly free. Moreover, apart from text-based materials, children can listen to audio storybooks and watch educational videos. Hence, digital learning is not only convenient, but it is also an enjoyable way of teaching children how to read. However, excessive use of gadgets can lead to several health risks, especially vision problems. On the other hand, textbooks have been the primary source of knowledge and information for learners for many years now. Compared to using other devices with brighter screens, paper-based resources are easier to read. Furthermore, when using books, children can fully concentrate on what they are reading instead of getting distracted by advertisements or online games. Thus, their effectiveness and readability as learning materials have been proven and tested. Lastly, while books are indeed quite pricey, they are not affected by technological hassles attached to the use of technology, including battery shortage. In conclusion, online materials and paper books both have their pros and cons. Hence, the two modes of learning should be combined to provide the best learning experience for children.
These days,
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many
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people
argue about the most effective method of teaching
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children
how to read. While
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some
advocate the
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use
of digital
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materials
, others
still
consider the traditional way of using
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books
as the best. In my opinion,
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children
should
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use
both
interchangeably
to
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improve
their literacy
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skills
.

Admittedly
, reading
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materials
on the internet is all the rage due to the advancements in technology. Unlike paper
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books
or
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other
printed reading
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materials
, there are a variety of resources available online, such as electronic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
and articles, which are
mostly
free.
Moreover
, apart from text-based
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materials
,
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children
can listen to audio storybooks and
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watch
educational videos.
Hence
, digital
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learning
is not
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only
convenient,
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but
it is
also
an enjoyable way of teaching
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children
how to read.
However
, excessive
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use
of gadgets can lead to several health
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risks
,
especially
vision problems.

On the
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other
hand, textbooks have been the primary source of knowledge and information for learners for
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many
years
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now
. Compared to using
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other
devices with brighter screens, paper-based resources are easier to read.
Furthermore
, when using
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books
,
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children
can
fully
concentrate on what they are reading
instead
of getting distracted by advertisements or online games.
Thus
, their effectiveness and readability as
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learning
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materials
have
been proven
and
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tested
.
Lastly
, while
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books
are
indeed
quite pricey, they are not
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affected
by technological hassles attached to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of technology, including battery shortage.

In conclusion
, online
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materials
and paper
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books
both have their pros and cons.
Hence
, the two modes of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
should
be combined
to provide the best
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
experience for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe online reading materials should only be used for a child to learn to read whereas others believe only printed material should be used. v. 18

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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