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Some people consider price as the most important thing to think about when buying products ( such as cell phone ) or services ( e. g: medical treatment ). Do you agree or disagree v.1

Some people consider price as the most important thing to think about when buying products ( such as cell phone ) or services ( e. g: medical treatment ). v. 1
Clusters of people in the market when buying things often prioritize discount as the most crucial factor to choose ideal goods and services. While I emphasize quality should take the lead, I also believe that the expense is equally important On the one hand, quality is a great scale for customers in the long run. This reflects the trustworthy side of a manufacture or a brand which offer people with essential possession and lastly durable as it won’t be worn out after a long-time using. Moreover, the norm of perception of construction will decide how secure the manufacture is when it comes to people’s house, thus people may not be aware of the risk or the tragic scenario after having it worked. For example, a cheap service serves them with unkindness and inefficient facilities will no longer take the customers away with insecurity and unpleasant. Not only character entices them with highly-insurance productions, but it also supports and enriches markets. Those will be brightened by people when striving for much better manufactures in the market place, as the results, it will gradually come lying or dishonest businesses to an end and sooner improve people’s live and shopping’s need. On the other hand, pay would be a mindful thing to consider when buying a product. Firstly, it may guide customers to choose better construction. Every so often, not every product with higher price will provide with assurance, the cost that they are handed out even cheaper than expected, but as many manufactures want to gain more profit, they make them twice and triple time more expensive with the same function as the others. Secondly, customers now crave extravagant goods’ prices, especially wealthy customers who possess these as a status symbol. For example, if a rich buys a luxurious phone with loads of money and then show off to his friends, he would take pride in his friends’ compliment of his wealth. In short, customers should consider both expenditure and character as a plan to buy the most ideal and long- lasting productions. It will become more practical and get people into a less strained shopping experience
Clusters of
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people
in the market when buying things
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
prioritize discount as the most crucial factor to choose ideal
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
and services. While I emphasize quality should take the lead, I
also
believe that the expense is
equally
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important


On the one hand, quality is a great scale for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
customers
in the long run. This reflects the trustworthy side of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
manufacture
or a brand which offer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
with essential possession and
lastly
durable as it won’t
be worn
out after a long-time using.
Moreover
, the norm of perception of construction will decide how secure the
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manufacture
is when it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
to
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people’s
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
,
thus
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people
may not be aware of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
or the tragic scenario after having it worked.
For example
, a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cheap
service serves them with unkindness and inefficient facilities will no longer take the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
customers
away with insecurity and unpleasant. Not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
character entices them with
highly
-insurance productions,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
it
also
supports and enriches markets. Those will
be brightened
by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
when striving for much better manufactures in the market place, as the results, it will
gradually
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
lying or dishonest businesses to an
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
and sooner
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
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people’s
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
and shopping’s need.

On the other hand
, pay would be a mindful thing to consider when buying a product.
Firstly
, it may guide
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
customers
to choose better construction. Every
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
, not every product with higher price will provide with assurance, the cost that they
are handed
out even cheaper than
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
as
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many
manufactures want to gain more profit, they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them twice and triple time more expensive with the same function as the others.
Secondly
,
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customers
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
crave extravagant
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
’ prices,
especially
wealthy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
customers
who possess these as a status symbol.
For example
, if a rich
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buys
a luxurious phone with loads of money and then
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
off to his friends, he would take pride in his friends’ compliment of his wealth.

In short,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
customers
should consider both expenditure and character as a plan to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
the most ideal and long- lasting productions. It will become more practical and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
into a less strained shopping
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
experience
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people consider price as the most important thing to think about when buying products ( such as cell phone ) or services ( e. g: medical treatment ). v. 1

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
354 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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Lexical Resource: 8.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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