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Some people believe government should spend money on building train and subway lines to reduce traffic congestion. Others think that building more and wider roads is the better way to reduce traffic congestion. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.5

Some people believe government should spend money on building train and subway lines to reduce traffic congestion. Others think that building more and wider roads is the better way to reduce traffic congestion. v. 5
Over the recent years, traffic congestion is an aching problem of a variety of countries around the world. While some maintain that constructing more and wider road is an effective way to alleviate this problem, I feel that building trains and subway lines are a better measure. There are two justifiable reasons why constructing and expanding roads can bring about some merits. In the first place, this method can mitigate the volume of transportation. These days, with the explosion of population, there are a myriad of people using private transport such as cars or motorbikes in order to commute on the streets, which leads to the movement jams happening in lots of regions especially in big cities. Erecting wider road systems, therefore, can help to tackle this issue because it can diminish obstruction during rush hours. In the second place, this solution can save national budget. In some developing countries, building subway lines is not feasible on the grounds that these systems require a high initial investment and cost a great deal of money, so extending roads is cheaper and can save more money for governments. On the contrary, I am of the opinion that building train and metro lines is more effective to enhance the traffic situation. This approach will create some positive impacts on the environment and time. When it comes to the environment, when trains and subway lines are constructed, there will be less private transport as well as a public one on the streets. Accordingly, we can reduce the amount of carbon dioxide from cars, buses or motorbikes emitted into the atmosphere, which results in optimistic effects on the environment. In terms of time, trains and subways can move with a high-speed, so it can save more time for city dwellers because of the fact that they do not need to spend a lot of hours pacing back and forth to work when they use trains or underground lines. To sum up, building wider roads can have some advantages, but I believe that it is better when governments spend money constructing train and metro lines because it will brings more benefits compared to roads’ construction
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some
maintain that constructing more and wider
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road
is an effective way to alleviate this problem, I feel that
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building
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trains
and
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subway
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lines
are a better measure.

There are two justifiable reasons why constructing and expanding
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roads
can bring about
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some
merits. In the
first
place, this method can mitigate the volume of transportation. These days, with the explosion of population, there are a
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myriad
of
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people
using private transport such as cars or motorbikes in order to commute on the streets, which leads to the movement jams happening in lots of regions
especially
in
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big
cities. Erecting wider
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road
systems,
therefore
, can
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help
to tackle this issue
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because
it can diminish obstruction during rush hours. In the second place, this solution can save national budget. In
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some
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developing countries
,
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building
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subway
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lines
is not feasible on the grounds that these systems require a high initial investment and cost a great deal of money,
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so
extending
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roads
is cheaper and can save more money for
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governments
.

On the contrary
, I am of the opinion that
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building
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train
and metro
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lines
is more effective to enhance the traffic situation. This approach will create
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some
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positive
impacts on the environment and time. When it
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comes
to the environment, when
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trains
and
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subway
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lines
are constructed
, there will be less private transport
as well
as a public one on the streets.
Accordingly
, we can
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reduce
the amount of carbon dioxide from cars, buses or motorbikes emitted into the atmosphere, which results in optimistic effects on the environment. In terms of time,
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trains
and
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subways
can
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move
with a high-speed,
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so
it can save more time for city dwellers
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because of the fact that
they do not need to spend
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a lot of
hours pacing back and forth to work when they
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use
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trains
or underground lines.

To sum up,
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building
wider
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roads
can have
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some
advantages,
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but
I believe that it is better when
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governments
spend money constructing
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train
and metro
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lines
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because
it will
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brings
more benefits compared to
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roads’
construction
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe government should spend money on building train and subway lines to reduce traffic congestion. Others think that building more and wider roads is the better way to reduce traffic congestion. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
358 words
7.5
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