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Some people believe bicycle have a lot of advantages while others believe bicycle have more disadvantages Discuss both views and give your opinion v.2

Some people believe bicycle have a lot of advantages while others believe bicycle have more disadvantages 2
Ever since before, bicycle was a part of our lives. However, many people argued that bicycle makes life easy and healthy, while others oppose that two wheeler has many disadvantages. In my opinion I believe, bicycle give us plethora of positive things not only to the people but also to this environment. On the one hand, it is argued by some one that bicycle often take time consuming, feeling tiredness, and so on. In brief, people who prefer to use bicycle as a medium for transportation would be late at the actual time very often in school and office. At once, bicycle travelers must go early than other vehicles like car bus or train because, which need long time to ride self without support of machines. Secondly, cycle riders must have enough stamina and become energetic always to get rid of tiredness and fatigue during office hours or school time. Otherwise, that would be affect to their performance as a whole like being late at boarding time and missing an interview by excessive stress related to long cycle ride. On the other hand, bicycle ride is often considered as an exercise by many such as, fixed time pattern for cycling may lead to build up body muscles and being away from many diseases. While, exercising by cycle reduce fat and cholesterol and may have less chance to become cardiac problem and diabetes. Secondly, bicycle usage has another benefit such as they mitigate environmental pollution in contrast to other method of transportation which use natural resources like coal, gas and oil. For instance, one of the main city in mexico which is avoided heavy vehicles in once in a week establish the lower rate of air pollution by means of bicycle mode of transportation. To sum up, in my perspective, nevertheless, there are some draw back in terms of time and tide, positive aspect of bicycle reached at the peak overall. Moreover, make use of cycling helps to be healthy and young so, people would have longevity.
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bicycle
was a part of our
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,
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many
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people
argued that
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bicycle
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makes
life easy and healthy, while others oppose that
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two wheeler
has
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many
disadvantages. In my opinion I believe,
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bicycle
give us plethora of
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positive
things not
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only
to the
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people
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also
to this environment.

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by
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some one
that
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bicycle
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often
take
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time consuming
, feeling tiredness, and
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on.
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,
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people
who prefer to
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use
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bicycle
as a medium for transportation would be late at the actual
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time
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very
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often
in school and office. At once,
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bicycle
travelers
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must
go
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early
than
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other
vehicles like car bus or train
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because
, which need long
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time
to ride self without support of machines.
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, cycle riders
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must
have
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enough
stamina and become energetic always to
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get
rid of tiredness and fatigue during office hours or school
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time
.
Otherwise
, that would be affect to their performance as a whole like being late at boarding
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time
and missing an interview by excessive
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stress
related to long cycle ride.

On the
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other
hand,
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bicycle
ride is
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often
considered as an exercise by
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many
such as,
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fixed
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time
pattern for cycling may lead to build up body muscles and being away from
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many
diseases. While, exercising by cycle
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reduce
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fat
and cholesterol and may have less chance to become cardiac problem and diabetes.
Secondly
,
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bicycle
usage has another benefit such as they mitigate environmental pollution
in contrast
to
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other
method of transportation which
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use
natural resources like coal, gas and oil.
For instance
, one of the main city in
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mexico
which
is avoided
heavy vehicles in once in a week establish the lower rate of air pollution by means of
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bicycle
mode of transportation.

To sum up, in my perspective,
nevertheless
, there are
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some
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draw
back in terms of
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time
and tide,
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positive
aspect of
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bicycle
reached at the peak
overall
.
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,
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make
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use
of cycling
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helps
to be healthy and young
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so
,
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people
would have longevity.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe bicycle have a lot of advantages while others believe bicycle have more disadvantages 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
336 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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