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Some people argue that the government should spend more money on educating science. However, others believe that there are some subjects are more important. What extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people argue that the government should spend more money on educating science. However, others believe that there are some subjects are more important. What extent v. 1
How to use government funding appropriately is always a heated topic among the public. Some folks state that more government capital should be invested in science education while others are holding opposite opinions. This essay will argue why governments should fund all subjects instead of science only. On the one hand, it is true that science plays an important role in the global village. Funding science education will eventually improve people’s lives dramatically which not only individuals but also nations involved. For instance, chemical research may be improved if capital from government funding has been increased. This will lead to positive outcomes like many diseases may cure as well as more scientists are cultivated. Additionally, leading science will also enhance nations’ competitiveness in the globalization. Thus, in order to sustain the economic prosperity and improving living standard that investing more capital in science seems like a necessary task. On the other hand, despite science is significant in modern society, it does not mean that other subjects are unnecessary. Art and crafts which enriching people’s mental as well as life experience. For example, watching a movie or listening to music after one-day stressful working could certainly help people to relax and enrich their emotions. Besides, without the crafts individuals’ lives may suffer. If more money invests in such subject will encourage people to create more convenient crafts which is beneficial to all the residents. In conclusion, although it seems like science is increasingly important in recent age, the importance of other subjects cannot be ignored. Personally, I strongly agree with governments should invest in all subjects, not for science solely.
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folks state that more
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government
capital should
be invested
in
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science
education while others are holding opposite opinions. This essay will argue why
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governments
should fund all
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subjects
instead
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science
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only
.

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science
plays an
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important
role in the global village. Funding
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science
education will
eventually
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improve
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people’s
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lives
dramatically
which not
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only
individuals
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but
also
nations involved.
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, chemical research may be
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improved
if capital from
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government
funding has
been increased
. This will lead to
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positive
outcomes like
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many
diseases may cure
as well
as more scientists
are cultivated
.
Additionally
, leading
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science
will
also
enhance nations’ competitiveness in the globalization.
Thus
, in order to sustain the economic prosperity and improving living standard that investing more capital in
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science
seems like a necessary task.

On the
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other
hand, despite
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science
is significant in modern society, it does not mean that
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other
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subjects
are unnecessary. Art and crafts which enriching
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people’s
mental
as well
as life experience.
For example
, watching a movie or listening to music after one-day stressful working could
certainly
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help
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people
to relax and enrich their emotions.
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, without the crafts individuals’
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lives
may suffer.
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If
more money invests in such
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subject
will encourage
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people
to create more convenient crafts which is beneficial to all the residents.

In conclusion
, although it seems like
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science
is
increasingly
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important
in recent age, the importance of
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other
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subjects
cannot be
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ignored
.
Personally
, I
strongly
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agree
with
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governments
should invest in all
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subjects
, not for
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science
solely
.
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26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people argue that the government should spend more money on educating science. However, others believe that there are some subjects are more important. What extent v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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