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Some people think university professors should spend more time doing research while others think they should spend more time educating students. What is your view? v.1

Some people think university professors should spend more time doing research while others think they should spend more time educating students. What is your view? v. 1
There is no doubt that there is a wide range of salaries in some nations nowadays. While some people believe that extremely high remunerations are in favour of a nation, others argue that this trend does more harm than good and hence the government should put a cap on how much one can earn. In this essay I will discuss both sides of the argument (write: the argument) and lend my support for the latter view. Those who believe that high salary packages are good for a country might support it for various reasons. Firstly, higher salaries would bring a better lifestyle to the country. This is because the money always circulates within the country and keeps changing hands. The more the money in circulation, the more the prosperity. Secondly, they might also argue that a high salary means a better job. For example, the traders in investment banks are the people who make millions of dollars every year and undoubtedly trading is one of the most attractive professions. On the other hand, I would argue that the free upward movement of salaries should be checked and controlled by the government because of the intense competition it creates along with the huge disparity of incomes in a society. Competitiveness beyond a certain point can make human life awful. This is because people get into the rat race and compare them with others rather than enjoying what they already have. Ultimately, this mentality results in stress and tension. Also, the wide range of income difference can lead to criminal activities. This is due to the fact that poor people would find it extremely difficult to earn higher salaries through legal means, and might get tempted into traps of easy money. To conclude, although the very high salaries may benefit a certain section of the society, it leads to unhealthy competition and a spurt in criminal activities. Therefore, in my opinion, the advantages of this phenomenon are outweighed by the disadvantages and it is the responsibility of the government to check it.
There is no doubt that there is a wide range of
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salaries
in
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some
nations nowadays. While
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some
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people
believe that
extremely
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high
remunerations are in
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favour
of a nation, others argue that this trend does more harm than
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good
and
hence
the
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government
should put a cap on how much one can earn. In this essay I will discuss both sides of the argument (write: the argument) and lend my support for the latter view.

Those who believe that
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high
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salary
packages are
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good
for a country might support it for various reasons.
Firstly
, higher
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salaries
would bring a better lifestyle to the country. This is
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because
the money always circulates within the country and
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keeps
changing hands. The more the money in circulation, the more the prosperity.
Secondly
, they might
also
argue that a
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high
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salary
means a better job.
For example
, the traders in investment banks are the
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people
who
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make
millions of dollars every year and
undoubtedly
trading is one of the most attractive professions.

On the other hand
, I would argue that the free upward movement of
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salaries
should be
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checked
and controlled by the
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government
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because
of the intense competition it creates along with the huge disparity of incomes in a society. Competitiveness beyond a certain point can
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make
human life awful. This is
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because
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people
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get
into the rat race and compare them with others
rather
than enjoying what they already have.
Ultimately
, this mentality results in
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stress
and tension.
Also
, the wide range of income difference can lead to criminal activities.
This is due to the fact that
poor
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people
would find it
extremely
difficult to earn higher
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salaries
through legal means, and might
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get
tempted into traps of easy money.

To conclude
, although the
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very
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high
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salaries
may benefit a certain section of the society, it leads to unhealthy competition and a spurt in criminal activities.
Therefore
, in my opinion, the advantages of this phenomenon
are outweighed
by the disadvantages and it is the responsibility of the
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government
to
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check
it.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think university professors should spend more time doing research while others think they should spend more time educating students. What is your view? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
340 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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