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Some people are always in a hurry to go places and get things done. Other people prefer to take their time and live life at a slower pace. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

Some people are always in a hurry to go places and get things done. Other people prefer to take their time and live life at a slower pace. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
To tackle the problems of traffic congestion and the shortage of housing, it is suggested that large companies and factories in major cities should be relocated into the countryside. I think this policy can be effective to some extent, but it is difficult to implement, with possible objections and negative outcomes. There is no doubt that the dense population and limited land resources are responsible for housing shortage in major cities, while the rural area is sparsely populated with sufficient land supply. If some companies, factories and their employees moved out of town, there would be more vacant buildings to meet the demand of urban dwellers. Besides, with fewer people travelling to and from work in the downtown, congestion is expected to be reduced and pressure on the public transportation system eased. However, the strategy of business relocation seems to be unfeasible, considering the negative outcomes that may ensue. It may impact the sales of some companies whose customers mainly come from the urban area. Also, the employees may reject to move to the countryside, as they can no ‘ longer enjoy high quality educational resources, medical services and entertainment facilities in the city. The rural infrastructure is relatively backward and life is less convenient. People need to travel between the countryside and the city frequently, leading to new traffic problems, especially on the weekend. Overall, moving some companies to the rural area can reduce the population and traffic in the city and more houses can be vacated. However, this policy is difficult to put into practice, as some companies and their employees may be unwilling to move.
To tackle the problems of traffic congestion and the shortage of housing, it
is suggested
that large
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companies
and factories in major
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cities
should
be relocated
into the countryside. I
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think
this policy can be effective to
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some
extent,
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but
it is difficult to implement, with possible objections and
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negative
outcomes.

There is no doubt that the dense population and limited land resources are responsible for housing shortage in major
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cities
, while the rural area is
sparsely
populated with sufficient land supply. If
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some
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companies
, factories and their employees
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moved
out of town, there would be more vacant buildings to
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meet
the demand of urban dwellers.
Besides
, with fewer
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people
travelling to and from work in the downtown, congestion is
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expected
to be
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reduced
and pressure on the public transportation system
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eased
.

However
, the strategy of business relocation seems to be unfeasible, considering the
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negative
outcomes that may ensue. It may impact the sales of
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some
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companies
whose customers
mainly
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come
from the urban area.
Also
, the employees may reject to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
to the countryside, as they can no ‘ longer enjoy high quality educational resources, medical services and entertainment facilities in the city. The rural infrastructure is
relatively
backward and life is less convenient.
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People
need to travel between the countryside and the city
frequently
, leading to new traffic problems,
especially
on the weekend.

Overall
, moving
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some
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companies
to the rural area can
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reduce
the population and traffic in the city and more
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houses
can
be vacated
.
However
, this policy is difficult to put into practice, as
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some
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companies
and their employees may be unwilling to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
.
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IELTS essay Some people are always in a hurry to go places and get things done. Other people prefer to take their time and live life at a slower pace. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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